[Gen-art] Gen-ART review of draft-campbell-art-rfc5727-update-02

"Vijay K. Gurbani" <vkg@bell-labs.com> Fri, 26 February 2016 20:43 UTC

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I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on
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Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments
you may receive.

Document: draft-campbell-art-rfc5727-update-02
Reviewer: Vijay K. Gurbani
Review Date: Feb-26-2016
IETF LC End Date: Not known
IESG Telechat date: Not known

This document is ready as a BCP, however, it does have 1 Minor issue
that I detail below.

Major: 0
Minor: 1
Nits: 0

Minor:
- S1, "Other RAI working groups develop extensions to SIP that do not
  change the core protocol, new applications of SIP, and other
  technologies for interactive communication among humans."

  Are we intentionally limiting interactive communications only to
  "humans"?  I would suspect that this would be limiting, no?  A
  bunch of SIP SUBS/NOTs happen between automaton, or machines.
  Surely we don't want to exclude these in the future.  My suggestion
  would be to simply take out the phrase "among humans".

Thanks,

- vijay
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