Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART Review of draft-ietf-l2vpn-vpls-pe-etree-10

Hi Jari,

I got the message from the responsible AD that a new version shall be submitted only after the telechat.
And all the resolutions will be included in that version.

Thanks,
Yuanlong

> -----Original Message-----
> From: Jari Arkko [mailto:jari.arkko@piuha.net]
> Sent: Thursday, December 03, 2015 8:08 PM
> To: Jiangyuanlong; Russ Housley
> Cc: draft-ietf-l2vpn-vpls-pe-etree.all@ietf.org; IETF Gen-ART; IETF
> Subject: Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART Review of draft-ietf-l2vpn-vpls-pe-etree-10
> 
> Many thanks for your detailed review, Russ!
> 
> Yuanlong, will there be a new draft version or other edits before the draft is
> approved?
> 
> Jari
> 
> On 17 Nov 2015, at 00:53, Jiangyuanlong <jiangyuanlong@huawei.com>
> wrote:
> 
> > Russ,
> >
> > Thanks a lot for your review and good observations.
> > Please see my comments in line.
> >
> > Best regards,
> > Yuanlong
> >
> >> -----Original Message-----
> >> From: Russ Housley [mailto:housley@vigilsec.com]
> >> Sent: Saturday, November 14, 2015 1:28 AM
> >> To: draft-ietf-l2vpn-vpls-pe-etree.all@ietf.org
> >> Cc: IETF Gen-ART; IETF
> >> Subject: Gen-ART Review of draft-ietf-l2vpn-vpls-pe-etree-10
> >>
> >> I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area
> >> Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by
> >> the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please wait for direction from your
> >> document shepherd or AD before posting a new version of the draft.
> >>
> >> For more information, please see the FAQ at
> >> <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>.
> >>
> >> Document: draft-ietf-l2vpn-vpls-pe-etree-10
> >> Reviewer: Russ Housley
> >> Review Date: 2015-11-13
> >> IETF LC End Date: 2015-11-24
> >> IESG Telechat date: unknown
> >>
> >> Summary:  Almost Ready
> >>
> >>
> >> Major Concerns: None
> >>
> >>
> >> Minor Concerns:
> >>
> >> Sections 4.1 and 5.3.1 inclues a reference to [802.1Q-2011].  Should
> >> this be the 2014 version of the document?  If not, please add the
> >> informative reference for [802.1Q-2011].
> >>
> > [YJ] Yes, all these should refer to [802.1Q-2014].
> >
> >>
> >> Other Editorial Comments:
> >>
> >> The Abstract should appear on the title page.
> >>
> > [YJ] OK.
> >
> >> Section 3 needs a reference for MEF 6.1:
> >> s/Specification MEF 6.1/Specification MEF 6.1 [MEF6.1]/ Also,
> >> [MEF6.1] needs to be added as a normative reference.
> >>
> > [YJ] All these will be updated to MEF 6.2.
> >
> >> Section 3 needs a reference for IEEE 802.1Q-2003:
> >> s/B.1.3 of IEEE 802.1Q-2003/B.1.3 of IEEE 802.1Q-2003 [802.1Q-2003]/
> >> Also, please add an informative reference for [802.1Q-2003].
> >>
> > [YJ] Yes, we will add an informative reference for [802.1Q-2003].
> >
> >> Third level section headings do not have space between the section
> >> number and the section title.  For example:
> >> s/5.3.1.PW Processing/5.3.1. PW Processing/
> >>
> > [YJ] OK.
> >
> >> In Fig 4, there is room to shift the figure to the right, this will allow the
> "AC"
> >> labels to fit better on the left:
> >>
> >>              +----------------------------------------+
> >>              |           VPLS-capable PE model        |
> >>              |   +---------------+          +------+  |
> >>              |   |               |==========|TVSI-1|------------
> >>   +---+  AC  |   |               ------------      |------------ PWs
> >>   |CE |----------|     Bridge    ------------      |------------
> >>   +---+      |   |               | Root &   +------+  |
> >>              |   |     Module    | Leaf VLAN   o      |
> >>              |   |               |             o      |
> >>              |   |               |             o      |
> >>              |   |               |             o      |
> >>              |   |               |             o      |
> >>   +---+  AC  |   |               |   VLAN-n +------+  |
> >>   |CE |----------|               ------------VSI-n |-------------
> >>   +---+      |   |               |==========|      |-------------
> PWs
> >>              |   |               |     ^    |      |-------------
> >>              |   +---------------+     |    +------+  |
> >>              |                         |              |
> >>              +-------------------------|--------------+
> >>                            LAN emulation Interface
> >>
> >>          Figure 4  A VPLS PE Model for E-Tree with a Single T-VSI
> >
> >
> > [YJ] OK.
> >
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