Re: [Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-netmod-syslog-model-21.txt

"Clyde Wildes (cwildes)" <cwildes@cisco.com> Thu, 08 March 2018 21:43 UTC

From: "Clyde Wildes (cwildes)" <cwildes@cisco.com>
To: Francis Dupont <Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr>, "gen-art@ietf.org" <gen-art@ietf.org>
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Francis,

Thanks for your review. My comments below…

On 3/5/18, 2:53 PM, "Francis Dupont" <Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr> wrote:

    I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area
    Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed
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    Document: draft-ietf-netmod-syslog-model-21.txt
    Reviewer: Francis Dupont
    Review Date: 20180225
    IETF LC End Date: 20180228
    IESG Telechat date: unknown
    
    Summary: Ready
    
    Major issues: None
    
    Minor issues: None
    
    Nits/editorial comments: 
    (I took my notes on version 21 but I have version 23 in front of me)
    
     - ToC page 2 and 6 page 27 (title): Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments

[clw] Accepted
    
     - 1 page 3: acknowledgement -> acknowledgement

[clw] Accepted
    
     - 4.1 page 10: do the same than 1.1 page 3: refer to RFC8174 too
      for keywords.

[clw] Accepted 
  
     - 4.1 page 18 (advanced-compare): spectify -> specify

[clw] Accepted
    
     - 4.1 page 23 (remote transport and tls) (twice):
      specified: an ipv4 address, an ipv6 address, ipv4->IPv4 and ipv6->IPv6

[clw] one address is for the UDP case and the other is for the TLS case. I think this this is ok.
    
     - 6 page 27: there is no "and" between the two last names and no
      final dot so I am afraid the list was truncated (BTW obviously iy is
      not the case but please add a final dot, i.e.:
      Aleksandr Zhdankin -> Aleksandr Zhdankin.

[clw] Accepted.

Thanks,

Clyde
    
    Note I trust the Yang tools to have checked the syntax.
    
    Regards
    
    Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr

[Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-netmod-syslog-mode… Francis Dupont
Re: [Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-netmod-syslog-… Alissa Cooper
Re: [Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-netmod-syslog-… Clyde Wildes (cwildes)