[Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-roll-routing-dispatch-03.txt

Francis Dupont <Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr> Wed, 26 October 2016 21:53 UTC

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Document: draft-ietf-roll-routing-dispatch-03.txt
Reviewer: Francis Dupont
Review Date: 20161025
IETF LC End Date: 20161019
IESG Telechat date: 20161027

Summary: Ready

Major issues: None

Minor issues: None

Nits/editorial comments:
 - 1 page 3: wording:
   to much smaller values than the IPv6 maximum transmission unit (MTU)
   of 1280 bytes.
  this statement doesn't make sense without an extra word as "guaranteed"
  before "IPv6 maximum..."

 - 3.2.2 page 8 and 8 page 25: e.g. -> e.g.,

 - 4.3 page 10: please expand the first occurrence of the DODAG abbrev
  (DODAG is in the RFC-editor abbrev list but is not starred as well known.
   BTW RPL is in the same case but IMHO does not need expansion in the
   Abstract and the intro)

 - 4.3.1 page 10 figure 5: for consistency: Coalesced -> coalesced

 - 4.3.2 page 11: formally the 2 paragraphs beginning by If and Else
  should be indented (ask the RFC Editor to do that)

 - 6.3 page 21: spurious comma in [RFC6550],.

 - 9 page 25: I disagree a bit about decompression to be security neutral
  because an atatcket can use error propagation by a decompressor.
  Now if I understand well there should be a L2 security so attacks
  based on decompression are limited and anyway covered by compression
  RFC (6282)... So I leave this to the security directorate.

 - A.2 page 31: defiend -> defined

 - Authors' Addresses page 35: Please ask the RFC Editor to uniformize
  France/FRANCE case (or put FR :-).

Regards

Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr