Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-dime-e2e-sec-req-04.txt
Jouni Korhonen <jouni.nospam@gmail.com> Thu, 02 June 2016 14:58 UTC
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Subject: Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-dime-e2e-sec-req-04.txt
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Thanks Christer, And sorry for not responding earlier.. See my comments inline. 5/7/2016, 7:48 AM, Christer Holmberg kirjoitti: > > > I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on > Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at > <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq> > > > > Document: draft-ietf-dime-e2e-sec-req-04 > > Reviewer: Christer Holmberg > > Review Date: 7 May2016 > > IETF LC End Date: 12 April 2016 > > IETF Telechat Date: N/A > > Summary: The document is well > written, and almost ready for publication is informational RFC. However, > I have a few editorial issues, related to the Introduction, that I ask > the authors to address. > > Major Issues: None > > Minor Issues: None > > Editorial Issues: > > > > Q_ABSTRACT_1: > > > > The text says that the draft “discusses” requirements. In my opinion it > should say “defines” or “specifies”. Ack. "specifies" sounds as a good choice. > > Q_INTRODUCTION_1: > > Please add references for TLS (for TCP) and DTLS (for SCTP). > Ack. > > Q_INTRODUCTION_2: > > The text says: “…or alternative security mechanisms independent of > Diameter (e.g., IPsec) is used.” > > 2A: I guess it should be “are used”? > Yes.. the whole sentence IMO reads badly, so I have some overall rewording proposals. OLD: The Diameter base protocol specification [2] offers security protection between neighboring Diameter peers and mandates that peer connections must be protected by TLS (for TCP), DTLS (for SCTP) or alternative security mechanisms independent of Diameter (e.g., IPsec) is used. NEW: The Diameter base protocol specification [RFC6733] defineds security protection between neighboring Diameter peers. The Diameter mandates that peer connections must be protected by TLS [RFC5246] (for TCP), DTLS [RFC6083] (for SCTP) or using security mechanisms that are independent of Diameter such as IPsec [RFC4301]. > 2B: I am not sure I understand what “independent of Diameter” means. > It is actually quite direct quotation from base protocol RFC6733 text. Basically meaning when using (D)TLS the Diameter node itself has to implement/terminate the security, while with IPsec it does not necessarily need to do anything (e.g., when site-to-site IPsec is in place). > > Q_INTRODUCTION_3: > > The text talks about security between non-neighbour nodes, while the > draft name includes “e2e”. However, when reading Section 4, > non-neighbour does not necessarily mean end-to-end. I think it would be > good to explicitly clarify that in the Introduction. > Ok. This terminology issue was brought up also in two other review afair. I would actually propose rewording the document name, since that seems to be the only place where "e2e" is really misplaced and the document name is goofy in any case. OLD: Diameter AVP Level Security End-to-End Security: Scenarios and Requirements NEW: AVP Level Security for Non-neighboring Diameter Nodes: Scenarios and Requirements and also.. OLD: Diameter End-to-End Security NEW: Diameter AVP Level Security > > Q_INTRODUCTION_4: > > The text says: “This document collects requirements for developing a > solution to protect Diameter AVPs.” > > 2A: It needs to be clear that it’s about protecting AVPs between > non-neighbour nodes. > Ok. > 2B: Instead of “collect”, please use the same terminology as in the > Abstract. Ok. That will be 'specifies' then. > Q_INTRODUCTION_5: > > Please enhance AVP on first occurrence. Currently it’s not > done until Section 3. > Ack. Thanks, Jouni > > _______________________________________________ > Gen-art mailing list > Gen-art@ietf.org > https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art >
- [Gen-art] Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-dime-e2e-s… Christer Holmberg
- Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-dime-e… Jari Arkko
- Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-dime-e… Jouni
- Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-dime-e… Jouni Korhonen
- Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-dime-e… Christer Holmberg