Re: [Gen-art] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-detnet-mpls-over-udp-ip-06

Alissa Cooper <alissa@cooperw.in> Wed, 02 December 2020 21:17 UTC

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Subject: Re: [Gen-art] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-detnet-mpls-over-udp-ip-06
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Christer, thanks for your review. Balázs, thanks for your response. I entered a No Objection ballot.

Alissa


> On Oct 1, 2020, at 8:51 AM, Balázs Varga A <balazs.a.varga=40ericsson.com@dmarc.ietf.org> wrote:
> 
> Hi Christer,
> 
> Thanks for the review. I agree with all your comments and will be corrected in next version. In detail:
> Q1, Yes, RFC 7510 statement does apply to this document. Statement will be added to the introduction section.
> DetNet documents focus on solutions for networks that are under a single administrative control or within a 
> closed group of administrative control.
> Q2, OK, second paragraph will be moved to the end of the introduction section as proposed.
> Q3, OK, Terminology will be aligned with RFC 7510 (i.e., MPLS-in-UDP).
> 
> Cheers
> Bala'zs
> 
> -----Original Message-----
> From: Christer Holmberg via Datatracker <noreply@ietf.org> 
> Sent: Tuesday, September 1, 2020 10:48 PM
> To: gen-art@ietf.org
> Cc: last-call@ietf.org; detnet@ietf.org; draft-ietf-detnet-mpls-over-udp-ip.all@ietf.org
> Subject: Genart last call review of draft-ietf-detnet-mpls-over-udp-ip-06
> 
> Reviewer: Christer Holmberg
> Review result: Almost Ready
> 
> I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the IESG for the IETF Chair.  Please treat these comments just like any other last call comments.
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> Document: draft-ietf-detnet-mpls-over-udp-ip-06
> Reviewer: Christer Holmberg
> Review Date: 2020-09-01
> IETF LC End Date: 2020-09-10
> IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat
> 
> Summary: In general I think the document is almost ready for publication, but I have a few minor issues and nits that I would like the authors to address.
> 
> Major issues: N/A
> 
> Minor issues:
> 
> Q1: In the last paragraph of Section 4, there is a statement from RFC 7510 aboout MPLS-in-UDP not being allowed on the general Internet etc. I think it should be explicitly indicated whether that also applies to this document. The document talks about "IP networks", but it is unclear what the scope really is.
> And, if  the RFC 7510 statement does apply to this document, I think it shall be stated much earlier: either in the Introduction, or in a dedicated Applicability Section.
> 
> Nits/editorial comments:
> 
> Q2: In the Introduction, I like to have the this-document-does-this-and-that text at the end. If possible, please consider moving the 2nd paragraph to the end of the Section.
> 
> Q3: The first sentence of Section 3 says:
> 
>    "This document builds on the specification of MPLS over UDP defined in
>    [RFC7510]."
> 
> ...and Section 4 says "MPLS over UDP/IP encapsulation".
> 
> RFC 7510 talks about MPLS-in-UDP, so please align the terminology.
> 
> 
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