[Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-mmusic-mux-exclusive-08.txt
Francis Dupont <Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr> Mon, 11 July 2016 16:27 UTC
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Subject: [Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-mmusic-mux-exclusive-08.txt
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I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please treat these comments just like any other last call comments. For more information, please see the FAQ at <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. Document: draft-ietf-mmusic-mux-exclusive-08.txt Reviewer: Francis Dupont Review Date: 20160707 IETF LC End Date: 20160708 IESG Telechat date: unknown Summary: Ready Major issues: None Minor issues: None Nits/editorial comments: - 4.4 page 5: I am not sure that "The offerer might e.g. send a new offer" is correct (i.e., is a comma required? where?) I leave this to the RFC Editor... - 5.2 page 6 and 5.3 page 7: I'd like to get titles on same pages than updates. IMHO it is an unwanted side-effect of a device which forces OLD nd NEW TEXTs to be on same pages. Something else for teh RFC Editor... - 5.2 page 7: my spell checker complains about signalled but as it is in the OLD TEXT there is no serious reasons to not get it in the NEW one. - 5.3 page 8: "a=candidiate:" -> "a=candidate:" Regards Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr
- [Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-mmusic-mux-exclusi… Francis Dupont
- Re: [Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-mmusic-mux-exc… Jari Arkko
- Re: [Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-mmusic-mux-exc… Christer Holmberg