[Gen-art] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-detnet-flow-information-model-10

[Jouni Korhonen via Datatracker <[e-mail]>]

Reviewer: Jouni Korhonen
Review result: Ready with Nits

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Document: draft-ietf-detnet-flow-information-model-??
Reviewer: Jouni Korhonen
Review Date: 2020-09-11
IETF LC End Date: 2020-09-11
IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat

Summary:
This informational document is ready for publication with some editorial nits.

Major issues:
None.

Minor issues:
None.

Nits/editorial comments:

1) Line 210:   remove the excess full stop after "Section 6"
2) Section 1.1 lines 221 to 226. I do not see a reason to the intro text here..
It will read odd after a while when things move on. I recommend leaving only
the following text with some rewording:
  "Therefore, the DetNet flow and service
    information models described in this document are based on
    [IEEE8021Qcc], which is an amendment to [IEEE8021Q].
    This document specifies flow and service information models only."
3) Line 853: YANG is referred without a reference. In general, the YANG model
gets mentioned for the first time in the summary as "These models are used as
input for the YANG model". That came a bit out of sudden here and a some more
context would be nice to have.