Re: [Gen-art] Review of draft-ietf-nvo3-use-case-15

Lucy yong <lucy.yong@huawei.com> Fri, 06 January 2017 15:46 UTC

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From: Lucy yong <lucy.yong@huawei.com>
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Hi Ralph,

Thank you for the review. We will have all acronyms expansion in next version and add a reference for DC services.  

Regards,
Lucy

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Subject: [Gen-art] Review of draft-ietf-nvo3-use-case-15

Reviewer: Ralph Droms
Review result: Ready with Nits

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Document: draft-ietf-nvo3-use-case-??
Reviewer: Ralph Droms
Review Date: 2017-01-06
IETF LC End Date: 2017-01-11
IESG Telechat date: 2017-01-19

Summary: This draft is ready for publication as an Informational RFC.

Major issues: None

Minor issues: None

Nits/editorial comments: 

I found several acronyms that did not have expansions.  I recommend a pass over the document for unexpanded acronyms..

Section 2: What is "broadcast/unknown" traffic (spec. "unknown"?); please expand the acronym "BUM".
  The paragraph that begins with "One NVO3 network [...]" is indented differently from the rest of the text.  Intentional or a typo?

Section 3.2: An illustrating figure for the use case described in this section would be helpful.
  Expand acronyms "PE" and "ABSR".
  I found the text using "Option A" and "Option B" confusing.  Exactly what are those options?

Section 5: I didn't understand the references to IaaS, PaaS and SaaS in the summary - there are no references to those services in the body of the document, or back pointers from the summary to relevant preceding text.

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