Re: [Gen-art] review of draft-atarius-dispatch-meid-urn-as-instanceid-05.txt

Francis, thanks for your review. Roozbeh, thanks for your responses. I have entered a No Objection ballot.

Alissa

> On Dec 18, 2017, at 6:24 PM, R Atarius <r_atarius@yahoo.com> wrote:
> 
> Hello Francis,
> 
> please see my comments below
> 
> Thanks
> Roozbeh 
> 
> 
> From: Francis Dupont <Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr>
> To: gen-art@ietf.org 
> Cc: draft-atarius-dispatch-meid-urn-as-instanceid.all@ietf.org
> Sent: Monday, December 11, 2017 8:05 AM
> Subject: review of draft-atarius-dispatch-meid-urn-as-instanceid-05.txt
> 
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> Document: draft-atarius-dispatch-meid-urn-as-instanceid-05.txt
> Reviewer: Francis Dupont
> Review Date: 20171124
> IETF LC End Date: 20171208
> IESG Telechat date: unknown
> 
> Summary: Ready
> 
> Major issues: None
> 
> Minor issues: None
> 
> Nits/editorial comments: 
> - ToC page 2 and 11 page 7: Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments
> 
> <Roozbeh> Both spellings are correct but first one is preferred by British English vs. the second one by American. I have no problem to remove "e".
> 
> - 1 page 2: please expand abbrev in at the first use in the body
>   for URN (optional as it is a well known abbrev according to
>   https://www.rfc-editor.org/materials/abbrev.expansion.txt <https://www.rfc-editor.org/materials/abbrev.expansion.txt>),
>   NSS and MEID.
> 
> <Roozbeh> OK 
> 
> - 1 page 2: please mark the RFC 5626 quote as a quote (e.g., in its
>   own paragraph with a few spaces more for indentation.
> 
> <Roozbeh> will this work for you?
> 
>    RFC 5626 [2] requires that a UA SHOULD create a Universally Unique
>    Identifier (UUID) URN as specified in RFC 4122 <https://tools.ietf.org/html/rfc4122> [7 <https://tools.ietf.org/html/draft-atarius-dispatch-meid-urn-as-instanceid-05#ref-7>] as its instance-id
>    but allows for the possibility to use other URN schemes. According to
>    RFC 5626 [2] 
>    
>    "If a URN scheme other than UUID is used, the UA MUST only use URNs 
>    for which an RFC (from the IETF stream) defines how the specific URN 
>    needs to be constructed and used in the "+sip.instance" Contact header 
>    field parameter for outbound behavior."  
> 
>    This specification meets this requirement by specifying how the 3GPP2 
>    MEID URN is used in the "+sip.instance" Contact header field parameter 
>    for outbound behavior and draft-atarius-dispatch-meid-urn <https://tools.ietf.org/html/draft-atarius-dispatch-meid-urn> [8 <https://tools.ietf.org/html/draft-atarius-dispatch-meid-urn-as-instanceid-05#ref-8>] specifies 
>    how the 3GPP2 MEID URN is constructed.
> 
> 
> 
> - 2 page 3: RFC 2119 was updated by RFC 8174 (note the RFC Editor
>   will update this section if you don't)
> 
> <Roozbeh> I prefer RFC Editor to do it so I pass. Thanks
> 
> - 5 page 4: UAC abbrev was not introduces: I believe it stands for
>   User Agent Client (so it is bad practice but the text is not ambiguous)
> 
> <Roozbeh> OK!
> 
> - 9 page 6: I suggest to remove the comma in
>   "Entities that log the instance-id, need ..."
>   (but if you prefer to keep it I shan't object)
> 
> <Roozbeh> I prefer to keep it. Thanks
> 
> - 9 page 6: IPSec -> IPsec
> 
> <Roozbeh> OK!
> 
> - 11.1 [5] page 7: RFC 2119 -> 8174
> 
> <Roozbeh> I prefer RFC Editor to do it so I pass. Thanks
> 
> Regards
> 
> Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr <mailto:Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr>
> 
> 
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