[Gen-art] Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-ietf-opsawg-capwap-hybridmac-06
Meral Shirazipour <meral.shirazipour@ericsson.com> Sat, 08 November 2014 01:17 UTC
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From: Meral Shirazipour <meral.shirazipour@ericsson.com>
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I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq. Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you may receive. Document: draft-ietf-opsawg-capwap-hybridmac-06 Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour Review Date: 2014-11-07 IETF LC End Date: 2014-11-10 IESG Telechat date: NA Summary: This draft is ready to be published as Standards Track RFC but I have some editorial comments . Nits/editorial comments: -[Page 1], Abstract, suggestion: please spell out CAPWAP: "Control And Provisioning of Wireless Access Points (CAPWAP)" -[Page 1], Abstract, suggestion: "However, in the split MAC mode," ----> use "Split" instead of "split" (to review the rest of draft) -[Page 1], Abstract, remove double occurrence of "clearly": in "...not been clearly clearly defined" Also correct: "functions are not been clearly clearly defined"----->"functions have not been clearly defined" or "functions are not clearly defined" Best Regards, Meral --- Meral Shirazipour Ericsson Research www.ericsson.com
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