[Gen-art] Gen-ART Telechat Review of draft-ietf-ippm-loss-episode-metrics-03

Pete McCann <mccap@petoni.org> Wed, 30 November 2011 03:01 UTC

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Document: draft-ietf-ippm-loss-episode-metrics-03
Reviewer: Peter McCann
Review Date: 2011-11-29
IETF LC End Date:
IESG Telechat date: 2011-12-01

Summary: Ready

Major issues: None

Minor issues: None

Nits/editorial comments:

Section 1.1:
   the ratio v(t) \
   a(t) of the variance v(t) and average a(t)
Should use a forward slash "/" instead of a backslash?

Section 2.4:
   and that both packet were
       received at Dst.
SHOULD BE:
   and that both packets were
       received at Dst.

Section 3.5:
   and we
   which to select
SHOULD BE:
   and we
   wish to select


Section 6.2:
   Geometric Steam
SHOULD BE:
   Geometric Stream

Section 7.1:
   ype-P-One-way-Bi-
   Packet-Loss-Geometric-Stream-Episode-Duration
SHOULD BE:
   Type-P-One-way-Bi-
   Packet-Loss-Geometric-Stream-Episode-Duration