[Gen-art] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-core-senml-13

Roni Even <ron.even.tlv@gmail.com> Wed, 28 March 2018 05:43 UTC

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Reviewer: Roni Even
Review result: Ready with Nits

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Document: draft-ietf-core-senml-??
Reviewer: Roni Even
Review Date: 2018-03-27
IETF LC End Date: 2018-03-30
IESG Telechat date: 2018-04-19

Summary:
The document is ready for publication as a standard track RFC with nits

Major issues:

Minor issues:

Nits/editorial comments:

1. in section 5.1.6 "another devices" should be "other devices" or "another
device" 2. in section 8  "It can simply hard code the output replacing the
1-wire device ID starting at byte 0x20 and going to byte 0x2F with it's device
ID". I think that the offset ix 0x10 to 0x1f