[Gen-art] review of draft-mcgrew-tls-aes-ccm-03.txt

Francis Dupont <Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr> Sun, 26 February 2012 17:28 UTC

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I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on 
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Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments 
you may receive.

Document: draft-mcgrew-tls-aes-ccm-03.txt
Reviewer: Francis Dupont
Review Date: 20120224
IETF LC End Date: 20120313
IESG Telechat date: known

Summary: Ready

Major issues: None

Minor issues: None but please check my comment about 8.2

Nits/editorial comments:
 - ToC page 2 and 6.2 page 6: a 8-octet -> an 8-octet

 - ToC page 2 and 9 page 6: Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments

 - 3 page 4: the wording about authentication tags is a bit strange:
  the first line uses singular and the next plural?

 - 3 page 4: the Nonce layout is not ambiguous for me but it doesn't
  use a common / easy to recognize programming language

 - 8.2 page 6: as the counter reuse is really critical I'd like to
  get a review by a cryptographer of 8.2 and 3.

Regards

Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr