Re: [Gen-art] [netext] Gen-ART LC review: draft-ietf-netext-update-notifications-07
Robert Sparks <rjsparks@nostrum.com> Thu, 22 August 2013 21:51 UTC
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Cc: netext@ietf.org, General Area Review Team <gen-art@ietf.org>, draft-ietf-netext-update-notifications@tools.ietf.org
Subject: Re: [Gen-art] [netext] Gen-ART LC review: draft-ietf-netext-update-notifications-07
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On 8/22/13 4:06 PM, Suresh Krishnan wrote: > Hi Robert, > Thanks a lot for the review. We will include the changes in the next > revision we submit. Please see proposed changes inline. > > On 08/22/2013 02:05 PM, Robert Sparks wrote: >> I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on >> Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at >> >> <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. >> >> Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments >> you may receive. >> >> Document: draft-ietf-netext-update-notifications-07 >> Reviewer: Robert Sparks >> Review Date: 2013-08-22 >> IETF LC End Date: 2013-08-29 >> IESG Telechat date: not scheduled >> >> Summary: This draft is ready for publication as Proposed Standard >> >> I had to read through this text several times to convince myself >> implementers could figure out what order they were required to take >> steps in vs where they had flexibility: >> >> o Upon accepting the Update Notification message, the mobile access >> gateway MUST process the message and perform the actions based on >> the Notification Reason. >> * If the (A) flag in the message is set to a value of (1), the >> mobile access gateway MUST first send an Update Notification >> Acknowledgement message and set the status code field according >> to the result of processing the Update Notification message. >> >> In particular, it's not immediately obvious if there is tension between >> that "MUST first" and having "the result of processing" available. >> Please consider rewording to make it clearer that this "result of >> processing" is not intended to include waiting for the result of some >> action processing this notification message might trigger. > I think we can lose the word first without losing anything. Does the > following rewording work for you? Yes, thanks! > > OLD: > If the (A) flag in the message is set to a value of (1), the mobile > access gateway MUST first send an Update Notification Acknowledgement > message and set the status code field according to the result of > processing the Update Notification message. > > NEW: > If the (A) flag in the message is set to a value of (1), the mobile > access gateway MUST send an Update Notification Acknowledgement message > with the status code field set based on the result of processing the > Update Notification message. > >> It might help readers understand the intended usual case retransmission >> mechanics if the expected default values listed in section 7 were called >> out earlier in the document. > Sure. Will call out the defaults at first use. > > Thanks > Suresh >
- [Gen-art] Gen-ART LC review: draft-ietf-netext-up… Robert Sparks
- Re: [Gen-art] [netext] Gen-ART LC review: draft-i… Suresh Krishnan
- Re: [Gen-art] [netext] Gen-ART LC review: draft-i… Robert Sparks
- Re: [Gen-art] [netext] Gen-ART LC review: draft-i… Robert Sparks
- [Gen-art] Gen-art telechat review: draft-ietf-net… Robert Sparks
- Re: [Gen-art] [netext] Gen-ART LC review: draft-i… Sri Gundavelli (sgundave)
- Re: [Gen-art] [netext] Gen-ART LC review: draft-i… Suresh Krishnan
- Re: [Gen-art] [netext] Gen-ART LC review: draft-i… Jari Arkko