Re: [Gen-art] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-pals-ethernet-cw-06

"Andrew G. Malis" <agmalis@gmail.com> Tue, 12 June 2018 17:51 UTC

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From: "Andrew G. Malis" <agmalis@gmail.com>
Date: Tue, 12 Jun 2018 13:50:51 -0400
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To: Brian Carpenter <brian.e.carpenter@gmail.com>
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Subject: Re: [Gen-art] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-pals-ethernet-cw-06
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Brian,

Thanks, your comments are much appreciated.

Cheers,
Andy


On Mon, Jun 11, 2018 at 11:30 PM, Brian Carpenter <
brian.e.carpenter@gmail.com> wrote:

> Reviewer: Brian Carpenter
> Review result: Ready with Nits
>
> Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-ietf-pals-ethernet-cw-06
>
> I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area
> Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed
> by the IESG for the IETF Chair.  Please treat these comments just
> like any other last call comments.
>
> For more information, please see the FAQ at
> <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>.
>
> Document: draft-ietf-pals-ethernet-cw-06.txt
> Reviewer: Brian Carpenter
> Review Date: 2018-06-12
> IETF LC End Date: 2018-06-15
> IESG Telechat date: 2018-06-21
>
> Summary: Ready with nits
> --------
>
> Comments:
> ---------
>
> This (with RFC4928) is a wonderful example of why layer violations are a
> Bad Thing.
>
> Nits:
> -----
>
> > 1.  Introduction
> ...
> >   This document recommends the use of the Ethernet pseudowire control
> >   word in all but exceptional circumstances.
>
> That's wrong, it *mandates* this usage with a MUST (first paragraph of
> section 4).
>
> > 3.  Background
> ...
> >   A recent posting on the Nanog email list has highlighted this
> >   problem:
> >
> >   https://mailman.nanog.org/pipermail/nanog/2016-December/089395.html
>
> No, it's no longer recent. How about:
>
>    For example, a posting on the Nanog email list highlighted this
>    problem:
>
> > 7.  Operational Considerations
> >
> >   CW presence on the PW is controlled by the configuration and may be
> >   subject to default operational mode of not being enabled.
>
> That sentence is hard to parse. Try this:
>
>    A configuration switch might determine whether the CW is used on the
> PW.
>    The default configuration might be to disable use of the CW.
>
>