Re: [Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-pcn-signaling-requirements-07.txt

["David Harrington" <[e-mail]>]

Thank you Francis.

Georgios, 
these are all minor editorial changes.
Please make them in your source, but do not submit a new revision yet.
I have scheduled this for telechat and IESG doesn't like moving
targets for telechats ;-) 
You may get changes requested by IESG.
When the document is sent to the RFC Editor they will ask for your
source file.

Thanks,
David Harrington
Director, IETF Transport Area
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> -----Original Message-----
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> Subject: RE: review of draft-ietf-pcn-signaling-requirements-07.txt
> 
> Hi Francis,
> 
> Thank you very much!
> 
> I will work out all your comments!
> 
> Best regards,
> Georgios
> 
> 
> ________________________________________
> Van: [e-mail] [[e-mail]]
> Verzonden: zaterdag 14 januari 2012 10:13
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> CC: [e-mail]
> Onderwerp: review of draft-ietf-pcn-signaling-requirements-07.txt
> 
> I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on
> Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at
> <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>.
> 
> Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call
comments
> you may receive.
> 
> Document: draft-ietf-pcn-signaling-requirements-07.txt
> Reviewer: Francis Dupont
> Review Date: 20120106
> IETF LC End Date: 20120113
> IESG Telechat date: unknown
> 
> Summary: Ready
> 
> Major issues: None
> 
> Minor issues: None
> 
> Nits/editorial comments:
>  - in the whole document: behaviour -> behavior and 
> signalling -> signaling
>   (note the spelling of collocated is dubious too)
> 
>  - Abstract page 1: in the latter case -> in the first case
> 
>  - Abstract page 1: the usage is to not refer to RFC in the Abstract
> 
>  - ToC page 2: Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments
> 
>  - 2 page 3: measures- -> measures (in general the document is at
>  the limit of abuse of '-' character, here it is clearly a typo)
> 
>  - 6 page 6: Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments
> 
>  - 6 page 6: I don't like the term 'generated', IMHO you can easily
>   find a better/nicer term.
> 
>  - 7.2 page 7: C. Le Faucher, -> C., Le Faucheur,
>                                    ^          ^
> 
> Regards
> 
> [e-mail]