[Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-netlmm-pmipv6-mib-05.txt (resent???)

[Francis Dupont <[e-mail]>]

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Document: draft-ietf-netlmm-pmipv6-mib-05.txt
Reviewer: Francis Dupont
Review Date: 20110527
IETF LC End Date: 20110512
IESG Telechat date: unknown

Summary: Ready

Major issues: None

Minor issues: None

Nits/editorial comments:
 - Toc page 2 and 9 page 67: Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments

 - 5 page 7: incoherent zip/country order for Japan

 - 5 page 9: pmip6Stats:pmip6BindingRegcounters ->
                                       ^
             pmip6Stats:pmip6BindingRegcounters
  (fortunately it is in a comment, but an ASN.1 comment :-)

 - 5 page 16: reindent pmip6MagProxyCOATable description
 (same pages 39 and 40 for pmip6LmaMinDelayBeforeBCEDelete)

 - 5 page 22 (pmip6MagBLlMnIdentifier): bad wording (the two is for
  the length, not the value).
  same page 28 for pmip6BindingMnLlIdentifier

 - 5 page 24: reformat pmip6MagBLAccessTechnologyType description

 - 5 page 24 (pmip6MagBLTimeRecentlyAccepted):
  acknowledgement -> acknowledgment
  (same page 29 for pmip6BindingMagLinkLocalAddress,
   page 30 for pmip6MissingMnIdentifierOption,
   page 31 for pmip6NotLMAForThisMobileNode, etc)

 - 5 page 31 (pmip6MissingMnIdentifierOption): router. -> router,

 - 5 page 37 (pmip6CounterDiscontinuityTime): viz. ???

 - 5 page 41 (pmip6LmaTimestampValidityWindow): bad wording:
  length of time ???

 - 5 page 50 (pmip6CoreReadOnlyCompliance): missing final '.' in
  description 

 - 6 page 63: extra space in 'pmip6MobileNodeGeneratedTimestampInUse :'

 - 6 page 63: IPSec -> IPsec

 - 10 page 67: presentation should be uniformized.

Regards

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PS: I don't remember if I sent this review, so anyway I resend it.