[Gen-art] Review of draft-ietf-sidr-publication-09

Peter Yee <peter@akayla.com> Sat, 07 January 2017 07:20 UTC

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Subject: [Gen-art] Review of draft-ietf-sidr-publication-09

Reviewer: Peter Yee
Review result: Ready with Nits

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Document: draft-ietf-sidr-publication-09
Reviewer: Peter Yee
Review Date: 2017-01-06
IETF LC End Date: 2017-01-06
IESG Telechat date: 2017-01-19

Summary: This specification defines a protocol for handling objects in
an RPKI repository.   The document seems fairly straightforward and
simple to understand.

Major issues:

Minor issues:

Nits/editorial comments: 

Page 5, Section 2.2, last paragraph, last sentence: perhaps change
"are permitted to" to "MAY"?

Page 7, Section 2.6, 1st paragraph: change "RelaxNG" to "RELAX NG".
(Hey, I had to look it up.)

Page 14, Section 4, 1st paragraph after rsync enumation: "safely" is
used but no subsequent mention is made of what is unsafe about the
non-overlapping rsync directories.  Is the reader expected to know
something about rsync's safety?  Nothing in the Security
Considerations deals with this topic.

Page 16, Section 6, 3rd paragraph, 2nd sentence: insert "private"
before "keys".  Insert "to" before "delete".

Page 17, Section 7: it might be good to include references to: XML,
RelaxNG, and maybe rsync (yeah, I know that one is a little tough).

[Gen-art] Review of draft-ietf-sidr-publication-09 Peter Yee