Re: [Gen-art] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-mpls-ri-rsvp-frr-07

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From: Chandrasekar Ramachandran <csekar@juniper.net>
To: Theresa Enghardt <theresa@inet.tu-berlin.de>, "gen-art@ietf.org" <gen-art@ietf.org>
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Hi Theresa,
I will address all your comments in the next revision of the draft. Please see inline for more responses.

Thanks,
Chandra.


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> Subject: Genart last call review of draft-ietf-mpls-ri-rsvp-frr-07
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> Reviewer: Theresa Enghardt
> Review result: Ready with Nits
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> Document: draft-ietf-mpls-ri-rsvp-frr-07
> Reviewer: Theresa Enghardt
> Review Date: 2019-10-30
> IETF LC End Date: 2019-11-05
> IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat
> 
> Summary: This draft is basically ready for publication, but has nits that
> should be fixed before publication.
> 
> Major issues: None.
> 
> Minor issues: None.
> 
> Nits/editorial comments:
> 
> The abstract is hard to parse and could be improved by fixing the following
> nits.
> 
> OLD: "Facility backup method allows"
> NEW: "The facility backup method allows"
>
> OLD: "The many-to-one nature of local repair technique"
> NEW: "The many-to-one nature of this local repair technique"
> 
> OLD: "This document enumerates facility backup procedures in RFC 4090"
> NEW: "This document enumerates the facility backup procedures in RFC
> 4090" [or "several facility backup procedures", if not all procedures are
> enumerated here]
> 
> OLD: "and hence make facility backup method refresh-interval dependent."
> NEW: "and hence make the facility backup method refresh-interval
> dependent."
> 
> OLD: "The RSVP-TE extensions defined in this document will enhance"
> NEW: "This document defines RSVP-TE extensions to enhance"
> 

[Chandra] Will update all the above in the next version of the draft.

> Are "facility backup method", "facility backup procedure" and "facility
> backup protection mechanism" all the same thing? Please consider using
> only a single term to avoid confusion.
>

[Chandra] Yes, they refer to the same and will use "facility backup protection mechanism" in all places.

> Please double-check the use of definite and indefinite articles in the rest of
> the document as well.

[Chandra] Yes, I will go parse the document fully and address this comment.