[Gen-art] Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-ietf-dnsop-dns-capture-format-08

Meral Shirazipour <meral.shirazipour@ericsson.com> Wed, 14 November 2018 00:23 UTC

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From: Meral Shirazipour <meral.shirazipour@ericsson.com>
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I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the IESG for the IETF Chair.  Please treat these comments just like any other last call comments.

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Document: draft-ietf-dnsop-dns-capture-format-08
Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour
Review Date: 2018-11-13
IETF LC End Date: 2018-11-13
IESG Telechat date: 2018-11-21


Summary: This draft is ready to be published as Standards Track RFC but I have some comments.
Major issues:
Minor issues:

Nits/editorial comments:
-[Page 21], last row in Table, "types are are omitted"----->"types are omitted"
-[Page 21], last row in Table,  "If the data type is are omitted"----->"If the data type is omitted"

-[Page 22], Section 7.5, "collection and and"---->"collection and"
-[Page 37], "may have be split"---->"may have been split"
-[Page 37], "may have be sent"---->"may have been sent"

-[Page 38], "choronological"--->"chronological"
-[Page 63], "schema to to read"---->"schema to read"

Best Regards,
Meral
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Meral Shirazipour
Ericsson Research
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