Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-ietf-ecrit-ecall-21
Meral Shirazipour <meral.shirazipour@ericsson.com> Fri, 06 January 2017 17:33 UTC
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From: Meral Shirazipour <meral.shirazipour@ericsson.com>
To: Randall Gellens <rg+ietf@randy.pensive.org>, "draft-ietf-ecrit-ecall.all@tools.ietf.org" <draft-ietf-ecrit-ecall.all@tools.ietf.org>, "gen-art@ietf.org" <gen-art@ietf.org>
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Subject: Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-ietf-ecrit-ecall-21
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Hi, Thank you. Best, Meral > -----Original Message----- > From: Randall Gellens [mailto:rg+ietf@randy.pensive.org] > Sent: Friday, January 06, 2017 4:07 AM > To: Meral Shirazipour <meral.shirazipour@ericsson.com>; draft-ietf-ecrit- > ecall.all@tools.ietf.org; gen-art@ietf.org > Subject: Re: Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-ietf-ecrit-ecall-21 > > Hi Meral, > > Thank you for your review, I appreciate it. Please see inline. > > At 12:11 AM +0000 1/6/17, Meral Shirazipour wrote: > > > I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area > > Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by > > the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please treat these comments just like > > any other last call comments. > > > > For more information, please see the FAQ at > > <https://trac.ietf.org/trac/gen/wiki/GenArtfaq>. > > > > Document: draft-ietf-ecrit-ecall-21 > > Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour > > Review Date: 2017-01-05 > > IETF LC End Date: 2017-01-06 > > IESG Telechat date: 2017-01-19 > > > > > > Summary: This draft is ready to be published as Standards Track RFC > > but I have comments. > > > > Major issues: > > > > Minor issues: > > -I find the document could be clearer if put in context with other > > documents related to the topic/if any. > > -By eCall do we mean voice and video calls? (is emergency sms another > > possibility?) > > The Introduction has text explaining that an eCall establishes a voice channel and > carries vehicle data, but I added "providing a voice channel and transmission of > data" earlier in the section to make this more clear. eCall does not use SMS. > > > > > Nits/editorial comments: > > -General: "next-generation eCall" and "NG-eCall" are both used. > > Would be clearer to use only one. > > -[Page 10], "PSAP interpets"--typo-->"PSAP interprets" > > -[Page 13], "package to accomodate"--typo-->"package to accommodate" > > -[Page 17], "how it it used"----->"how it is used" > > -[Page 17], "when it is is required"----->"when it is required" > > -[Page 18], "it is is required"----->"it is required" (two > > occurrences) -[Page 18], "how it it used."----->"how it is used." > > (two occurrences) -[Page 37], "Based on the the"---->"Based on the" > > > > Thank you. > > -- > Randall Gellens > Opinions are personal; facts are suspect; I speak for myself only > -------------- Randomly selected tag: --------------- The only normal people are the > ones you don't know very well. > --Joe Ancis
- [Gen-art] Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-ietf-… Meral Shirazipour
- Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-i… Randall Gellens
- Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-i… Meral Shirazipour