Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART Review of draft-ietf-l2vpn-vpls-pe-etree-10
Jiangyuanlong <jiangyuanlong@huawei.com> Mon, 16 November 2015 22:53 UTC
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From: Jiangyuanlong <jiangyuanlong@huawei.com>
To: Russ Housley <housley@vigilsec.com>, "draft-ietf-l2vpn-vpls-pe-etree.all@ietf.org" <draft-ietf-l2vpn-vpls-pe-etree.all@ietf.org>
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Russ, Thanks a lot for your review and good observations. Please see my comments in line. Best regards, Yuanlong > -----Original Message----- > From: Russ Housley [mailto:housley@vigilsec.com] > Sent: Saturday, November 14, 2015 1:28 AM > To: draft-ietf-l2vpn-vpls-pe-etree.all@ietf.org > Cc: IETF Gen-ART; IETF > Subject: Gen-ART Review of draft-ietf-l2vpn-vpls-pe-etree-10 > > I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area Review > Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the IESG for > the IETF Chair. Please wait for direction from your document shepherd or AD > before posting a new version of the draft. > > For more information, please see the FAQ at > <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. > > Document: draft-ietf-l2vpn-vpls-pe-etree-10 > Reviewer: Russ Housley > Review Date: 2015-11-13 > IETF LC End Date: 2015-11-24 > IESG Telechat date: unknown > > Summary: Almost Ready > > > Major Concerns: None > > > Minor Concerns: > > Sections 4.1 and 5.3.1 inclues a reference to [802.1Q-2011]. Should this be > the 2014 version of the document? If not, please add the informative > reference for [802.1Q-2011]. > [YJ] Yes, all these should refer to [802.1Q-2014]. > > Other Editorial Comments: > > The Abstract should appear on the title page. > [YJ] OK. > Section 3 needs a reference for MEF 6.1: > s/Specification MEF 6.1/Specification MEF 6.1 [MEF6.1]/ Also, [MEF6.1] > needs to be added as a normative reference. > [YJ] All these will be updated to MEF 6.2. > Section 3 needs a reference for IEEE 802.1Q-2003: > s/B.1.3 of IEEE 802.1Q-2003/B.1.3 of IEEE 802.1Q-2003 [802.1Q-2003]/ Also, > please add an informative reference for [802.1Q-2003]. > [YJ] Yes, we will add an informative reference for [802.1Q-2003]. > Third level section headings do not have space between the section number > and the section title. For example: > s/5.3.1.PW Processing/5.3.1. PW Processing/ > [YJ] OK. > In Fig 4, there is room to shift the figure to the right, this will allow the "AC" > labels to fit better on the left: > > +----------------------------------------+ > | VPLS-capable PE model | > | +---------------+ +------+ | > | | |==========|TVSI-1|------------ > +---+ AC | | ------------ |------------ PWs > |CE |----------| Bridge ------------ |------------ > +---+ | | | Root & +------+ | > | | Module | Leaf VLAN o | > | | | o | > | | | o | > | | | o | > | | | o | > +---+ AC | | | VLAN-n +------+ | > |CE |----------| ------------VSI-n |------------- > +---+ | | |==========| |------------- PWs > | | | ^ | |------------- > | +---------------+ | +------+ | > | | | > +-------------------------|--------------+ > LAN emulation Interface > > Figure 4 A VPLS PE Model for E-Tree with a Single T-VSI [YJ] OK.
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- Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART Review of draft-ietf-trill-… Donald Eastlake
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- [Gen-art] Gen-ART Review of draft-ietf-trill-pseu… Russ Housley
- Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART Review of draft-ietf-trill-… Mingui Zhang
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- Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART Review of draft-ietf-trill-… Steve Crocker
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- Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART Review of draft-ietf-mpls-s… Ronald Bonica
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- Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART Review of draft-ietf-l2vpn-… Jiangyuanlong
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- Re: [Gen-art] Resolution on comments of draft-iet… Sheng Jiang
- Re: [Gen-art] Resolution on comments of draft-iet… Jiangyuanlong
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