Re: [Gen-art] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-pals-status-reduction-04

Alissa Cooper <alissa@cooperw.in> Tue, 11 April 2017 18:55 UTC

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From: Alissa Cooper <alissa@cooperw.in>
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Subject: Re: [Gen-art] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-pals-status-reduction-04
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Dan, thank you for your review!
Alissa

> On Mar 31, 2017, at 11:39 AM, Dan Romascanu <dromasca@gmail.com> wrote:
> 
> Reviewer: Dan Romascanu
> Review result: Ready with Nits
> 
> I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area
> Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed
> by the IESG for the IETF Chair.  Please treat these comments just
> like any other last call comments.
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> Document: draft-ietf-pals-status-reduction-??
> Reviewer: Dan Romascanu
> Review Date: 2017-03-31
> IETF LC End Date: 2017-03-31
> IESG Telechat date: 2017-04-13
> 
> Summary:
> 
> This document describes a very useful optimization for MPLS LSP PWs
> operations by defining a method for generating an aggregated PW 
> status message transmitted on a MPLS LSP to indicate the status of the
> PWs carried on the LSP. The document is clear, detailed and provides
> all needed information for implementers to write code and for
> operators to deploy. 
> 
> Major issues:
> 
> Minor issues:
> 
> Nits/editorial comments: 
> 
> 1. In section 8, first paragraph: s/rages/ranges/
> 2. In sections 8.3, 8.4 the construct "IETF Review" is worded in three
> different ways (IETF review, IETF Review, "IETF Review") - better
> align
> 
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