[Gen-art] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-ipsecme-qr-ikev2-09

Christer Holmberg via Datatracker <noreply@ietf.org> Fri, 13 December 2019 20:17 UTC

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Reviewer: Christer Holmberg
Review result: Almost Ready

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Document: draft-ietf-ipsecme-qr-ikev2-09
Reviewer: Christer Holmberg
Review Date: 2019-12-13
IETF LC End Date: 2019-12-25
IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat

Summary: The document is well-written, and almost ready for publication.
However, I have a couple of minor comments that I would like the authors to

Major issues: None

Minor issues:


The Security Considerations lists IKEv2/IPSec algorithms that are not
considered quantum-resistant. However, that is not mentioned anywhere else. I
think it would be good to mention that in the Abstract and/or Introduction.


Section 3 says:

   "If the responder does not support this specification or does not have
   any PPK configured, then it ignores the received notification and
   continues with the IKEv2 protocol as normal."

I assume the ignoring of a non-supported notification and continuing with
normal IKEv2 is part of the IKEv2 specification. If so, I suggest to say add
something like:

", as described in RFCXXXX."

Nits/editorial comments:


The Security Considerations talk about the Grover's algorithm. Please add a