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Re: [Gen-art] Gen-art LC review of draft-ietf-avtcore-5761-update-02

Elwyn Davies <elwynd@dial.pipex.com> Fri, 16 September 2016 22:45 UTC

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Hi Christer.
Thanks.  That's fine.
Cheers,Elwyn


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-------- Original message --------From: Christer Holmberg <christer.holmberg@ericsson.com> Date: 16/09/2016  22:40  (GMT+00:00) To: Elwyn Davies <elwynd@dial.pipex.com> Cc: draft-ietf-avtcore-5761-update.all@ietf.org Subject: RE: Gen-art LC review of draft-ietf-avtcore-5761-update-02 


Hi Elwyn,
 
Thanks for your review! Please see inline.



Nits/editorial comments:


 
>s3.1: It is a bit pedantic, but 'to be sure, to be sure', add new first line:


>   In the rest of this section references to Sections 4 and 8 are to sections in [RFC 5761].


 
I’ll do that.
 


>s3.1: Maybe s/OLD TEXT/EXISTING TEXT/ and s/NEW TEXT/REPLACEMENT TEXT/


 
I’ve used OLD and NEW in the past, so I’d prefer to do that in this draft too :)
 


>s5: s/specifcation/specification/ (sorreee!)
 
I’ll fix that.
 
Thanks!
 
Regards,
 
Christer
 

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