Re: [Gen-art] Resolution on comments of draft-ietf-l2vpn-vpls-pe-etree-10

Sheng Jiang <jiangsheng@huawei.com> Tue, 15 December 2015 01:57 UTC

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From: Sheng Jiang <jiangsheng@huawei.com>
To: Jiangyuanlong <jiangyuanlong@huawei.com>, Russ Housley <housley@vigilsec.com>, Stephen Farrell <stephen.farrell@cs.tcd.ie>, "Jari Arkko" <jari.arkko@piuha.net>, Ben Campbell <ben@nostrum.com>, Barry Leiba <barryleiba@computer.org>, "Alvaro Retana (aretana)" <aretana@cisco.com>, Stewart Bryant <stewart.bryant@gmail.com>
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Hi, I can confirm this version addresses my OPS DIR review comments.

Thanks,

Sheng

>-----Original Message-----
>From: Jiangyuanlong
>Sent: Friday, December 11, 2015 7:17 PM
>To: Russ Housley; Stephen Farrell; Jari Arkko; Sheng Jiang; Ben Campbell; Barry
>Leiba; Alvaro Retana (aretana); Stewart Bryant
>Cc: draft-ietf-l2vpn-vpls-pe-etree.all@ietf.org; IETF Gen-ART; The IESG;
>BRUNGARD, DEBORAH A
>Subject: Resolution on comments of draft-ietf-l2vpn-vpls-pe-etree-10
>
>Hi all,
>
>Thanks a lot for your reviews.
>Based on all the comments received during the IESG evaluation, we have
>prepared a tentative version 11 for this draft.
>We believe all the comments are resolved, but please check whether you have
>any concerns with the texts in this version.
>
>If there are no further comments, we will upload it as the formal revision 11
>version.
>
>Best regards,
>Yuanlong
>
>> -----Original Message-----
>> From: BRUNGARD, DEBORAH A [mailto:db3546@att.com]
>> Sent: Thursday, December 03, 2015 11:03 PM
>> To: Jari Arkko
>> Cc: Jiangyuanlong; Russ Housley; draft-ietf-l2vpn-vpls-pe-etree.all@ietf.org;
>IETF
>> Gen-ART; IETF
>> Subject: Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART Review of draft-ietf-l2vpn-vpls-pe-etree-10
>>
>> Hi Jari,
>>
>> Yes, we'll be doing a new revision for addressing other comments.
>>
>> I've asked for today's telechat if no discusses to mark it as approved, revised
>> draft needed.
>>
>> Much thanks Russ for your review!
>>
>> Deborah
>>
>>
>> Sent from my iPhone
>>
>> > On Dec 3, 2015, at 1:08 PM, Jari Arkko <jari.arkko@piuha.net> wrote:
>> >
>> > Many thanks for your detailed review, Russ!
>> >
>> > Yuanlong, will there be a new draft version or other edits before the draft
>> > is approved?
>> >
>> > Jari
>> >
>> >> On 17 Nov 2015, at 00:53, Jiangyuanlong <jiangyuanlong@huawei.com>
>> wrote:
>> >>
>> >> Russ,
>> >>
>> >> Thanks a lot for your review and good observations.
>> >> Please see my comments in line.
>> >>
>> >> Best regards,
>> >> Yuanlong
>> >>
>> >>> -----Original Message-----
>> >>> From: Russ Housley [mailto:housley@vigilsec.com]
>> >>> Sent: Saturday, November 14, 2015 1:28 AM
>> >>> To: draft-ietf-l2vpn-vpls-pe-etree.all@ietf.org
>> >>> Cc: IETF Gen-ART; IETF
>> >>> Subject: Gen-ART Review of draft-ietf-l2vpn-vpls-pe-etree-10
>> >>>
>> >>> I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area
>Review
>> >>> Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the
>IESG for
>> >>> the IETF Chair. Please wait for direction from your document shepherd
>or AD
>> >>> before posting a new version of the draft.
>> >>>
>> >>> For more information, please see the FAQ at
>> >>> <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>.
>> >>>
>> >>> Document: draft-ietf-l2vpn-vpls-pe-etree-10
>> >>> Reviewer: Russ Housley
>> >>> Review Date: 2015-11-13
>> >>> IETF LC End Date: 2015-11-24
>> >>> IESG Telechat date: unknown
>> >>>
>> >>> Summary:  Almost Ready
>> >>>
>> >>>
>> >>> Major Concerns: None
>> >>>
>> >>>
>> >>> Minor Concerns:
>> >>>
>> >>> Sections 4.1 and 5.3.1 inclues a reference to [802.1Q-2011].  Should
>this be
>> >>> the 2014 version of the document?  If not, please add the informative
>> >>> reference for [802.1Q-2011].
>> >> [YJ] Yes, all these should refer to [802.1Q-2014].
>> >>
>> >>>
>> >>> Other Editorial Comments:
>> >>>
>> >>> The Abstract should appear on the title page.
>> >> [YJ] OK.
>> >>
>> >>> Section 3 needs a reference for MEF 6.1:
>> >>> s/Specification MEF 6.1/Specification MEF 6.1 [MEF6.1]/ Also, [MEF6.1]
>> >>> needs to be added as a normative reference.
>> >> [YJ] All these will be updated to MEF 6.2.
>> >>
>> >>> Section 3 needs a reference for IEEE 802.1Q-2003:
>> >>> s/B.1.3 of IEEE 802.1Q-2003/B.1.3 of IEEE 802.1Q-2003 [802.1Q-2003]/
>Also,
>> >>> please add an informative reference for [802.1Q-2003].
>> >> [YJ] Yes, we will add an informative reference for [802.1Q-2003].
>> >>
>> >>> Third level section headings do not have space between the section
>number
>> >>> and the section title.  For example:
>> >>> s/5.3.1.PW Processing/5.3.1. PW Processing/
>> >> [YJ] OK.
>> >>
>> >>> In Fig 4, there is room to shift the figure to the right, this will allow the
>"AC"
>> >>> labels to fit better on the left:
>> >>>
>> >>>             +----------------------------------------+
>> >>>             |           VPLS-capable PE model        |
>> >>>             |   +---------------+          +------+  |
>> >>>             |   |               |==========|TVSI-1|------------
>> >>>  +---+  AC  |   |               ------------      |------------ PWs
>> >>>  |CE |----------|     Bridge    ------------      |------------
>> >>>  +---+      |   |               | Root &   +------+  |
>> >>>             |   |     Module    | Leaf VLAN   o      |
>> >>>             |   |               |             o      |
>> >>>             |   |               |             o      |
>> >>>             |   |               |             o      |
>> >>>             |   |               |             o      |
>> >>>  +---+  AC  |   |               |   VLAN-n +------+  |
>> >>>  |CE |----------|               ------------VSI-n |-------------
>> >>>  +---+      |   |               |==========|
>|------------- PWs
>> >>>             |   |               |     ^    |
>|-------------
>> >>>             |   +---------------+     |    +------+  |
>> >>>             |                         |              |
>> >>>             +-------------------------|--------------+
>> >>>                           LAN emulation Interface
>> >>>
>> >>>         Figure 4  A VPLS PE Model for E-Tree with a Single T-VSI
>> >>
>> >>
>> >> [YJ] OK.
>> >>
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