[Gen-art] Telechat Review of draft-ietf-p2psip-share-09

Matt Miller <mamille2@cisco.com> Thu, 03 November 2016 02:21 UTC

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Document: draft-ietf-p2psip-share-09
Reviewer: Matthew A. Miller
Review Date: 2016-11-02
IETF LC End Date: 2016-10-25
IESG Telechat date: 2016-11-03


This document is ready to be published as a Standards Track
document once the nits are addressed.

Major issues: NONE

Minor issues: NONE

Nits/editorial comments:

* idnits reports a stale reference to I-D.ietf-p2psip-sip (should
  be RFC 7904).

* In 5.1. "Overview", the word "witch" should be "which".

* In 5.3. "Overlay Configuration Document Extension", there should
  be a space between "P2PSIP" and "[I-D.ietf-p2psip-sip]".

* In 6.2. "Revoking White Access", there should be a space between
  "see" and "[RFC6940]".

* In 6.4. "Operations of Storing Peers", a comma is missing between
  "peers" and "at" in the phrase "Storing peers at which Shared
  Resource and ACL are physically stored ...".

Non-issue comments:

* idnits is reporting weird spacing and "possible code", but that
  appears to be due to the Relax NG grammar.  In my opinion the nit
  can be safely ignored.

- m&m

Matt Miller
Cisco Systems, Inc.