Re: [Gen-art] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-sipcore-sip-push-21

Ben Campbell <ben@nostrum.com> Fri, 21 December 2018 23:40 UTC

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Subject: Re: [Gen-art] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-sipcore-sip-push-21
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> On Dec 20, 2018, at 9:37 AM, Christer Holmberg <christer.holmberg@ericsson.com>; wrote:
> 
> >   Example: pn-prid = 00fc13adff78512
> >
> >   For more information about the APNs Topic and device token:
> >
> > SB> Is the following part of the example? If so it could usefully be delimited
> > SB> as such, otherwise, I don't understand why it is not a normal document
> > SB> reference.
> >
> >   https://developer.apple.com/library/archive/documentation/NetworkingI <https://developer.apple.com/library/archive/documentation/NetworkingI>
> >   nternet/Conceptual/RemoteNotificationsPG/CommunicatingwithAPNs.html
> >
> > SB> Similarly in the following section
> 
> The link reference is not part of the example. Perhaps I could place to reference before the examples, to make that more clear?
> 
> Are you suggesting that I add the link to the reference section, similar to document references?
> 

One common approachto this  is to add a URL reference section after the normal references.

Thanks!

Ben.