[Gen-art] Gen-ART LC review of draft-ietf-ancp-pon-02

"Roni Even" <ron.even.tlv@gmail.com> Sun, 01 April 2012 15:36 UTC

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I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on
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Sorry for the late review due to IET meeting.

Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you
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Document: draft-ietf-ancp-pon-02

Reviewer: Roni Even

Review Date:2012-4-1

IETF LC End Date: 2012-3-30

IESG Telechat date:


Summary: This draft is ready for publication as an Informational RFC.


Major issues:


Minor issues:


Nits/editorial comments:


In section 4 "However, the broadcast capability on the PON enables the AN
(OLT) to send one copy on the PON as opposed to N  copies of a multicast
channel on the PON serving N premises being  receivers" I think the "being"
before the last word should be deleted


General editorial comment is about page breaks which can be better like
section 7 title is at the end of a page and the text is in the next page.
Also some of the figures and their descriptions are split between pages.