[Gen-art] Gen-ART LC review of draft-ietf-ancp-pon-02

["Roni Even" <[e-mail]>]

I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on
Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at
<http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>.

Sorry for the late review due to IET meeting.

Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you
may receive.

 

Document: draft-ietf-ancp-pon-02

Reviewer: Roni Even

Review Date:2012-4-1

IETF LC End Date: 2012-3-30

IESG Telechat date:

 

Summary: This draft is ready for publication as an Informational RFC.

 

Major issues:

 

Minor issues:

 

Nits/editorial comments:

 

In section 4 "However, the broadcast capability on the PON enables the AN
(OLT) to send one copy on the PON as opposed to N  copies of a multicast
channel on the PON serving N premises being  receivers" I think the "being"
before the last word should be deleted

 

General editorial comment is about page breaks which can be better like
section 7 title is at the end of a page and the text is in the next page.
Also some of the figures and their descriptions are split between pages.