[Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-mpls-rmr-12.txt

Francis Dupont <Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr> Tue, 05 November 2019 16:59 UTC

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Subject: [Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-mpls-rmr-12.txt
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I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area
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Document: draft-ietf-mpls-rmr-12.txt
Reviewer: Francis Dupont
Review Date: 20191028
IETF LC End Date: 20191105
IESG Telechat date: unknown

Summary: Ready

Major issues: None

Minor issues: None

Nits/editorial comments:
 - Requirement Language page 1: please add a reference to RFC 8174

 - 3.1 page 5: overriden -> overridden

 - 4.1 page 10 on Ring Node TLV: please swap SO and MBZ descriptions

 - 4.3 page 11: announcment -> announcement

 - 4.5 pafe 12: ; and -> and ; ?

Note that none requires a new version so address them only if you have
another reason to publish a new version of the document.

Regards 

Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr