Re: [Gen-art] Genart last call review of draft-wilde-service-link-rel-06

Erik Wilde <erik.wilde@dret.net> Tue, 20 November 2018 21:06 UTC

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To: Peter Yee <peter@akayla.com>, gen-art@ietf.org
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Subject: Re: [Gen-art] Genart last call review of draft-wilde-service-link-rel-06
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hello.

thanks, peter, for your review!

On 2018-11-20 17:21, Peter Yee wrote:
> Page 8, Section 7: RFC 2223 requires you do more than provide an ellipsis here.
>   You might want to consider what makes sense.  Perhaps a discussion of what
> happens to a client that obtains a maliciously formatted service-desc or even
> an errant service-desc.  While a human might be able to see through problems in
> a "service-doc", it's quite possible that a machine will want to take
> precautions about handling the received data and acting upon it.

thanks for the suggestion! 
https://github.com/dret/I-D/commit/3f065e662ccd66419c92246a2bba9bd8c5127ade 
adds security considerations.

> Nits/editorial comments:
> 
> Page 1, Note to Readers: Presumably this section will be removed prior to
> publication.

done in 
https://github.com/dret/I-D/commit/f5e8c10f4a9400d55a867d64b8aef9846ae4106b

> Page 3, 4th full paragraph, 1st sentence: Delete the comma after "consumption"
> and delete the "for" following that.
> 
> Page 5, Section 3.3, 1st paragraph, 1st section: change "of" to "between".  Put
> the section references in parentheses.
> 
> Page 5, Section 3.3, 1st paragraph, 2nd sentence: insert "a" before "better".

addressed in 
https://github.com/dret/I-D/commit/cc902371fff59b96d3185e643522fe8f1462d042

i think with these changes in the draft i have addressed the comments in 
this review. i have posted a new version of the draft that includes the 
changes mentioned here.

https://tools.ietf.org/html/draft-wilde-service-link-rel-07

thanks again and kind regards,

dret.

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