[Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-softwire-dslite-multicast-14.txt

Francis Dupont <Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr> Mon, 09 January 2017 14:42 UTC

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Document: draft-ietf-softwire-dslite-multicast-14.txt
Reviewer: Francis Dupont
Review Date: 20170106
IETF LC End Date: 2017012
IESG Telechat date: unknown

Summary: Ready with Nits

Major issues: None

Minor issues: please consider to publish this as a BCP (vs standard track)?
I don't know if this question is new or already got an answer,
this is why I kept the Ready summary. BTW the IANA section is empty
so there is nothing requiring a standard track document.

Nits/editorial comments: 
 - ToC page 3 and 10 page 16: Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments 

 - 4.2 page 7: RECOMMENDED inside an explicitly "not normative"
  section 4

 - 6.1 page 11: in "The mB4 may create": may -> MAY?

 - 6.3 page 11: in "decapsulate the IPv6 packet": IPv6 -> IPv4

 - 7.2 page 13 figure 3 and 8.1.1 page 15 figure 4:
   mPreifx64 -> mPrefix64

 - 7.2 page 13 last paragraph: (S6,G6) -> (S6, G6)
  (I am not strict about space or not but in this paragraph there is
   already a (S6, G6))

 - 7.5 page 14: Global scope;) -> Global scope)

 - 8.4 page 16: please use a non-breaking space so (S6, G6) stays
  on the same line in the text version (and hopefully (S4, G4) too).

 - Authors' Addresses page 20: China -> PR China (or any variant
  including CN (ISO IS 3166 2 letter code))

Regards

Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr