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From: "Reshad Rahman (rrahman)" <rrahman@cisco.com>
To: Robert Sparks <rjsparks@nostrum.com>, "gen-art@ietf.org" <gen-art@ietf.org>
CC: "netconf@ietf.org" <netconf@ietf.org>, "ietf@ietf.org" <ietf@ietf.org>, "draft-ietf-netconf-restconf-notif.all@ietf.org" <draft-ietf-netconf-restconf-notif.all@ietf.org>
Thread-Topic: Genart last call review of draft-ietf-netconf-restconf-notif-13
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Subject: Re: [Gen-art] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-netconf-restconf-notif-13
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Hi Robert,

Thank you for the review, please see inline.

On 2019-04-10, 12:17 PM, "Robert Sparks via Datatracker" <noreply@ietf.org> wrote:

    Reviewer: Robert Sparks
    Review result: Ready
    
    I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area
    Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed
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    Document: draft-ietf-netconf-restconf-notif-13
    Reviewer: Robert Sparks
    Review Date: 2019-04-10
    IETF LC End Date: 2019-04-12
    IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat
    
    Summary: Ready for publication as a proposed standard
    
    Nits/editorial comments:
    
    The abstract is quite terse. Please consider expanding it to something that
    stands better by itself.
TBH I'm not sure what else to add. I'll discuss with the other authors. 
    
    The sentence that starts "Driving these requirements" in the introduction does
    not follow where it sits in the paragraph. There is no antecedent for "these
    requirements". I suggest replacing the sentence with "Requirements for these
    mechanisms are captured in [RFC7923].
Makes sense, I'll make the change.
    
    The second sentence in the first paragraph of section 3 is a run-on. I suggest
    s/2.4, the/2.4. The/
Sure.

Regards,
Reshad.

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