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Jouni Korhonen <jouni.nospam@gmail.com> Mon, 29 August 2016 20:25 UTC

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Subject: [Gen-art] Gen-Art review of draft-ietf-6man-ipv6-mibs-obsolete-01
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Document: draft-ietf-6man-ipv6-mibs-obsolete-01
Reviewer: Jouni Korhonen
Review Date: 8/29/2016
IETF LC End Date: 2016-08-24
IESG Telechat date: 2016-09-01

Summary: Ready with nits. Note. I did not run these MIBs through
   any verification tools.

Major issues: None.

Minor issues:
* The document does not pass IDnits. The only complaint of IDnits that
   I am concerned of is:
   "** The document seems to lack an Introduction section."

   Anyway, if Motivation section is considered equivalent to
   Introduction section then I am fine and the IDnits complaints
   can be neglected all together.

* Other MIB modules than IPV6-TC has in each their DESCRIPTIONs
   text saying by what it was obsoleted. Unless I am missing something
   here (that justifies the absence of disclaimers) I would like to see
   similar text in each IPV6-TC DESCRIPTION as well.

Nits/editorial comments:
* Line 2223 has unnecessary linefeed/empty line.

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