[Gen-art] Genart last call review of draft-ietf-detnet-ip-over-mpls-05

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Reviewer: Tim Evens
Review result: Ready with Nits

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Document: draft-ietf-detnet-ip-over-mpls-??
Reviewer: Tim Evens
Review Date: 2020-04-20
IETF LC End Date: 2020-04-23
IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat


Major issues:

Minor issues:

Nits/editorial comments:

Some of the references refer to older revisions.  

* T-PE is referenced several times but not defined.
* d-CW is referenced in Figure 3 but not defined. 
* S-Label is referenced several times but not defined.

Figure 1 and 2 have the same label.

In Section 4.2:

* There is reference to section 5.1.1 and 5.1.2, but those sections 
do not exist in this draft.  Can you clarify which draft/RFC these
sections are referring to? 

* "Per [I-D.ietf-detnet-mpls], the DetNet MPLS data plane uses a single
   S-Label to support a single app flow.  Section 5.1.  DetNet IP Flow
   Identification Procedures ..."  

   Why is Section 5.1 referenced like this?

* "DetNet IP Flow Identification Procedures in [I-D.ietf-detnet-ip] states
   that a single DetNet flow is identified based on IP, and next level
   protocol, header information.  Section 4.4.  Aggregation..."  
   It would be more clear to specifically refer to the draft/rfc and section.