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Re: [Gen-art] [OPSAWG] Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-opsawg-hmac-sha-2-usm-snmp-05

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----- Original Message -----
From: "Christer Holmberg" <christer.holmberg@ericsson.com>
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Cc: <draft-ietf-opsawg-hmac-sha-2-usm-snmp.all@tools.ietf.org>
Sent: Saturday, April 11, 2015 2:07 PM

I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on
Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at
<http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>

Document:
draft-ietf-opsawg-hmac-sha-2-usm-snmp-05

Reviewer:                           Christer Holmberg

Review Date:                     11 April 2015

IETF LC End Date:             20 April 2015

IETF Telechat Date:         N/A

Summary:        The document is well written, and almost ready for
publication. I do, however, have a couple of comments (see below).

Major Issues: None

Minor Issues:

Q1_10-1: In the IANA Considerations section, IANA is requested to
register new values. However, it is not mentioned in which registry the
new values will be registered.

<tp>

Christer

You puzzle me.  When I look in the I-D I see

"IANA is requested to assign a value in the SnmpAuthProtocols registry "

which looks to me like a mention of which registry the new values will
be registered in.

Tom Petch


Editorial nits:

Q1_GENERAL-1:              Regarding reference, sometimes you say "RFC
XXXX [RFCXXXX]", sometimes "RFC XXXX" and sometimes "[RFCXXXX]".

I think you should be consistent, and e.g. use "RFC XXXX [RFCXXXX]" on
first occurrence, and then "RFC XXXX".

In some cases "[RFCXXXX]" is ok, though, e.g. in section 9.4 where you
say "SNMP-USER-BASED-SM-MIB [RFC3414].".







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