Re: [Gen-art] [DMM] Genart telechat review of draft-ietf-dmm-ondemand-mobility-16

"Moses, Danny" <danny.moses@intel.com> Thu, 21 February 2019 14:33 UTC

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Hi Russ,
Ack on both comments. Will be modified in the next revision.

Thanks,
Danny

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Subject: [DMM] Genart telechat review of draft-ietf-dmm-ondemand-mobility-16

Reviewer: Russ Housley
Review result: Ready

I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the IESG for the IETF Chair.  Please treat these comments just like any other last call comments.

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Document: draft-ietf-dmm-ondemand-mobility-16
Reviewer: Russ Housley
Review Date: 2019-02-17
IETF LC End Date: 2019-02-15
IESG Telechat date: 2019-02-21

Summary: Ready


Major Concerns:

None.


Minor Concerns:

None.


Nits:

In the Abstract: s/section 4 of [RFC7333]/RFC 7333/ (because references are not permitted in the Abstract).

In Section 3.1, last paragraph: drop the '(' and ')'.


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