Re: [Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-v6ops-ivi-icmp-address-06.txt

[Xing Li <[e-mail]>]

Hi, Francis,

Thank you very much! We will modify the draft during the RFC Editor process.

Best regards,

xing


Francis Dupont 写道:
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> Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments
> you may receive.
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> Document: draft-ietf-v6ops-ivi-icmp-address-06.txt
> Reviewer: Francis Dupont
> Review Date: 20120920
> IETF LC End Date: 20120925
> IESG Telechat date: unknown
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> Summary: Ready
>
> Major issues: None
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> Minor issues: None
>
> Nits/editorial comments:
>  In general the language itself could be improved even there is nothing
>  which is hard to understand (i.e., it is a comment only on the form).
>  I suggest to get some help from English native authors or to leave this
>  to the RFC Editor...
>
>  - 3 page 3: an non-IPv4- -> a non-IPv4-
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>  - 3 page 3: (style) bound for to (I suggest "sent to")
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>  - 3.1 page 3: uRPF -> unicast reverse path forwarding (uRPF)
>   (note: uRPF is in the RFC Editor abbrev list but not as "well known")
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>  - 3.1 page 3: (style) origination (I suggest "origin" or "source")
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>  - 3.2 page 4: a question (vs a comment): is RFC 5837 widely supported?
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>  - 8 page 5: Henrik Levkowetz is included twice
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>  - 9.1 page 5: BCP 84 is included as a normative reference?
>   (I have no concern but I'd like to warn this point is questionable)
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>  - 9.2 page 6: I am not sure ISO IS 3166 codes are appropriate in
>   postal addresses, so CN -> China?
>
> Regards
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