[Gen-art] Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-ccamp-rwa-info-22.txt

[Russ Housley <[e-mail]>]

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Document: draft-ietf-ccamp-rwa-info-22
Reviewer: Russ Housley
Review Date: 2014-11-09
IETF LC End Date: 2014-11-27
IESG Telechat date: unknown

Summary: Almost ready; a few minor things to clear up.

Major Concerns:

None.

Minor Concerns:

In section 3, please add a sentence or two that explains switching
subsystem and line subsystem.  The definitions might be best appear in
Section 2.  I checked in RFC 6163, but I did not find a description of
these terms there.  

Other Comments:

Section 1 begins with:

   The purpose of the following information model for WSONs ... 

In my opinion, it would be better to say something like:

   The purpose of the WSONs information model described in this
   document ...

Likewise, in section 3, it says:

   The following WSON RWA information model ...

In my opinion, it would be better to say something like:

   The WSON RWA information model in this document ...

In section 5.1, 3rd paragraph, it says:

   ... Since not all input ports
   can necessarily reach each resource block, the model starts with a
   resource pool input matrix RI(i,p) = {0,1} whether input port i can
   reach potentially reach resource block p.

s/reach potentially reach/potentially reach/