Re: [Gendispatch] First comments on draft-rsalz-2028bis-00.txt

["Salz, Rich" <[e-mail]>]

Thank you for the diligent and careful review! Changes are in https://github.com/richsalz/draft-ietf-rfc2028bis/pull/5

>    The document in general is inconsistent in how it handles this stuff.
    For example, Section 4.4 says, "The IETF Chair is an ex-officio member
    of the board.", but does not say that the IRTF Chair is also, and 4.3
    does not mention that the IAB Chair is also an ex-officio member of
    the IESG.

That's a good point.  Fixing that was fairly minor, so I decided to be complete rather than trying to focus on "the important parts" of the RFC process.

    In 4.3 and 4.4, "and are approved by" should say, "and are confirmed
    by", as that's the term that's used in the BCPs.

Fixed, thanks.

    Sections 4.8 and 4.9 don't try to talk about how the members (of the
    Trust and the LLC Board) are selected or confirmed, and simply refer
    to the BCPs.  It's probably best if 4.3 and 4.4 follow that as well
    (making my previous paragraph moot).

I think the summary that's there is worthwhile to readers. I suppose I could add how the LLC and Trust Board is picked. One argument against that is, like above, it's not something many deal with.  Thoughts?

    Section 4.8 should also include trademarks as something the Trust deals with.

Good catch.

    The Internet Society seems to have consolidated its branding to the
    full name and seems not to use "ISOC" these days, even to the point of
    redirecting <isoc.org> to <internetsociety.org>.  Given the few
    mentions that there are, we should probably use "the Internet Society"
    throughout, and just not say "ISOC" at all (though I think it's fine
    to use "[ISOC]" for the reference citation).

Fixed.

    In Section 4.7 you have a typo: ISRG

Fxied :)

    In Section 4.9 you have a typo: rseponsible

Mooted by Colin's proposal.