[GROW] Opsdir last call review of draft-ietf-grow-bgp-gshut-13

Susan Hares <shares@ndzh.com> Thu, 18 January 2018 08:45 UTC

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Reviewer: Susan Hares
Review result: Has Nits

Status: Nits

The operational procedures described in this process for the gshut comment are
accurately covered, and SHOULD work well.  The Appendices A-C add to an
operations document and should be retained for publication.

Technical nit:
location of technical nit: (section 4.3)
The document indicats that the "BGP implementers SHOULD provide configuration
knobs that utilize teh GRACEFUL_SHUTDOWN community."

What the problem is:
The document does not say is that their should be error reporting knobs to
track the use of GRACEFUL_SHUTDOWN community.  This can go in section 4.3 in
one or two sentences.

Editorial nit:
section 3. paragraph 2, p. 3

/This is because alternate paths can be hidden by knodes of an AS./
commment:  The implied "this" is too vague for a specification.

Fix:/This lack of path occurs because alternate paths can be hidden by nodes of
an AS."/