Re: [Hipsec] WGLC: draft-ietf-hip-native-nat-traversal-15

[Miika Komu <[e-mail]>]

Hi Tom,

On 02/19/2017 05:18 PM, Tom Henderson wrote:
> Hello, I have read the latest (-17) draft and sent some purely editorial
> comments to Miika.  I had a few non-editorial questions and comments.

thanks for the feedback. I fixed the editorial issues in version 18:

There's also a htmlized version available at:
https://tools.ietf.org/html/draft-ietf-hip-native-nat-traversal-18

A diff from the previous version is available at:
https://www.ietf.org/rfcdiff?url2=draft-ietf-hip-native-nat-traversal-18

I did not fix these (because I would prefer to keep the artwork small):

* Figure acronym un-abbreviations were not included
* ISPI and OSPI acronyms remain

(Also, if we use long parameter names in figures, I think all names 
should be long, not just mobility related)

A couple of fixes for me to edit:

* Appendix B: normative vs non-normative terminology
* Alex Elsayed reported imbalanced parentheses in one picture

These and the non-editorial comments from Tom and Jeff will be resolved 
in the next version.