Re: [Hipsec] WGLC: draft-ietf-hip-rfc4423-bis
Miika Komu <mkomu@cs.hut.fi> Tue, 08 April 2014 10:27 UTC
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Subject: Re: [Hipsec] WGLC: draft-ietf-hip-rfc4423-bis
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Hi, sure thing, thanks Tom for comments! On 04/08/2014 01:25 PM, Gonzalo Camarillo wrote: > Hi Tom, > > thanks for your comments. Authors, could you please look into this? > > Thanks, > > Gonzalo > > On 07/04/2014 12:08 AM, Henderson, Thomas R wrote: >>> Hi, >>> >>> we WGLCed this draft some time ago, but we are WGLCing it again at this >>> point to make sure people are happy with the current version: >>> >>> https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-hip-rfc4423-bis/ >>> >>> This WGLC will end on April 6th. Please, send your comments to this >>> list before then. >>> >> >> I read the revised version again today and believe it is ready to publish once the below nits are taken care of. I believe that they are mostly editorial but I'd be happy to discuss on the list. >> >> - Tom >> >> Section 1 >> --------- >> >> Old text: >> >> There is exactly one Host Identifier for each Host Identity. >> >> New text: >> >> There is exactly one Host Identifier for each Host Identity (although there may be transient periods of time such as key replacement when more than one identifier may be active). >> >> The reference to Section 7 should be to Section 6. >> >> The first use of ESP should be cited (it is later cited in 6.1). >> >> Section 2 >> --------- >> >> Old text: >> >> Public is | >> | | a relative term here, ranging from known to peers | >> | | only to known to the World. | >> >> New text: >> >> >> Public is | >> | | a relative term here, ranging from "known to | >> | | peers only" to "known to the world." | >> >> Again, the reference to HIP base exchange should be Section 6, not Section 7 >> >> Section 3 >> ----------- >> >> Old text: >> >> o The names should have a localized abstraction so that it can be >> used in existing protocols and APIs. >> >> New text: >> >> o The names should have a localized abstraction so that they can be >> used in existing protocols and APIs. >> >> Section 4 >> --------- >> >> Old text: >> >> a public-key-based HI can >> authenticate the HIP packets and protect them for man-in-the-middle >> attacks. >> >> New text: >> >> a public-key-based HI can >> authenticate the HIP packets and protect them from man-in-the-middle >> attacks. >> >> s/HIP BEX/HIP base exchange >> >> Section 4.2 >> ----------- >> s/through out/throughout >> >> Section 4.3 >> ----------- >> s/HIts/HITs >> >> Section 4.5 >> ----------- >> s/types of application/types of applications >> >> Old text: >> >> For instance, >> Light-weight Directory Access Protocol (LDAP) or in a Public Key >> Infrastructure (PKI) [I-D.ietf-hip-rfc6253-bis]. >> >> New text: >> >> For instance, a directory based on the >> Lightweight Directory Access Protocol (LDAP) or a Public Key >> Infrastructure (PKI) [I-D.ietf-hip-rfc6253-bis] may be used. >> >> s/associate with/associated with >> >> s/a LDAP or DHT/an LDAP-based directory or DHT >> >> Section 5 >> --------- >> >> Old text: >> >> As discussed above, the IP >> addresses can be seen to be a confounding of routing direction >> vectors and interface names. >> >> New text: >> >> As discussed above, the IP >> addresses can be seen to be a confounding of computing platform >> names and interface names. >> >> (or else delete this sentence as it is somewhat redundant with other sentences below; I just felt that the "confounding" aspect relates to EIDs and locators instead of routing direction vectors) >> >> Section 8 >> --------- >> s/cannot distinguished/cannot be distinguished >> >> Section 9 >> --------- >> s/intestigating/investigating >> >> s/Particularly, so called bloom filters/In particular, so-called Bloom filters >> >> (also in section 12.3, 'Bloom' is not capitalized; it should be either be capitalized everywhere (typical usage that I have seen) or lower case everywhere) >> >> s/datastructures/data structures >> >> s/by HIP working group/by the HIP working group >> >> Section 10 >> ---------- >> s/in a similar vain/similar to how >> >> Old text: >> The implementations should provide for a policy of >> initiator HIT to responder HIT. >> >> New text: >> The implementations should provide for a policy mapping of >> initiator HITs to responder HITs. >> >> Section 11 >> ---------- >> s/With the exception High-Performance/With the exception of High-Performance >> >> s/As majority of the/As the majority of the >> >> s/More agile IPv6 interoperability as discussed in Section 4.4./More agile IPv6 interoperability can be achieved, as discussed in Section 4.4. >> >> s/An addition, the underlying/Additionally, the underlying >> >> s/halves the size of access control lists/can potentially halve the size of access control lists >> >> the reference [scultz-intermittent] should probably be spelled [schuetz-intermittent] >> >> Section 11.3 >> ------------ >> s/accomodate/accommodate >> >> s/strictly speaking mandatory/mandatory >> >> Section 12.2 >> ------------ >> s/credit-based authorization approach Host Mobility/credit-based authorization approach for host mobility >> >> Section 12.3 >> ------------- >> s/There has been attempts/There have been attempts >> >> s/the protection of malign data flows/?? >> >> s/which the the end-hosts/which the end-hosts >> >> Section 15 >> ---------- >> s/RFC 4424/RFC 4423 >> >> > > _______________________________________________ > Hipsec mailing list > Hipsec@ietf.org > https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/hipsec >
- [Hipsec] WGLC: draft-ietf-hip-rfc4423-bis Gonzalo Camarillo
- Re: [Hipsec] WGLC: draft-ietf-hip-rfc4423-bis Henderson, Thomas R
- Re: [Hipsec] WGLC: draft-ietf-hip-rfc4423-bis Gonzalo Camarillo
- Re: [Hipsec] WGLC: draft-ietf-hip-rfc4423-bis Miika Komu
- Re: [Hipsec] WGLC: draft-ietf-hip-rfc4423-bis Robert Moskowitz
- Re: [Hipsec] WGLC: draft-ietf-hip-rfc4423-bis Miika Komu