Re: [HOKEY] Comments to draft-ietf-hokey-erp-aak-04

Hi Duowei,

Thanks for the comments, we will correct them accordingly.

2011/8/11 金多伟 <strobeking@gmail.com>om>:
> Hi All,
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> I have read the draft, and found the technique content are okay, but I found
> the following typos for the authors to correct.
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> 1. In abstract, the first paragraph, "a generic framework supporting
> multiple _types_ of authentication methods"
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> 2. In Section 4, the second paragraph, it should be "if the peer has _been_
> previously authenticated by means of ERP or ERP/AAK"
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> 3.In Section 5.2, the explanation about TVs and TLVs(the first paragraph in
> page 8), it should be “The username part of the NAI is the EMSKname used
> _to_ identify the peer”
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> 4. In Section 5.2, the explanation about Cryptosuite (the fourth paragraph
> in page 8), it should be “key lengths and output lengths are either
> indicated or (are) obvious from the cryptosuite name”
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> 5. In Section 5.3, the explanation about Cryptosuite (the fifth paragraph in
> page 10), it should be “key lengths and output lengths are either indicated
> or (are) obvious from the cryptosuite name”
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> 6. In Section 8, the eighth paragraph, it should be “the peer and the server
> derive the keys independently using parameters known _by_ each entity”
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> 7 In section 8, the thirteenth paragraph, it should be “Any domain-specific
> keys are further restricted _to be used_ only in the domain….”
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> Best regards,
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> Duowei Jin
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Zhen