#463, was: p7: editorial suggestions

[Julian Reschke <[e-mail]>]

On 2013-04-23 05:48, Mark Nottingham wrote:
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> * 2.1 "It uses an extensible, case-insensitive token..."  I know what's meant here, but the token itself isn't extensible; it's an extension point. Suggest: :It uses a case-insensitive token as a means to identify..."
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> * 2.1 "...based upon a challenge received from the server..." --> "...based upon a challenge received in a response"  ("from the server" implies that the next inbound server generated the challenge, which isn't always the case).
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> * 2.2 "Note that there can be multiple challenges with the same auth-scheme..." --> "Note that a response can have multiple challenges..."
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> * 2.2 "Unless otherwise defined by the authentication scheme,..." --> "Unless specifically allowed by the authentication scheme..."
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> * 2.3.1 "... can only be used once per challenge/credentials."  --> "...once in a challenge or credential."
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> * 2.3.1 needs references to p6 for cache-control directives it talks about.
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> * 3.1 "The client MAY repeat the request with a new or replaced Authorisation header field."  s/client/user agent/
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> * 4.1 'The "Authorization" header field allows a user agent to authenticate itself with a server..."   s/server/origin server/
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> * 4.3 "Its value consists of credentials containing the authentication information of the user agent for the proxy..."   s/user agent/client/
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> * 6.2 First paragraph - all instances of 'server' to 'origin server'
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> * 6.2 "This is of particular concern when a server hosts resources for multiple parties..."   s/server/origin server/
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> * 6.2 "...by using a different host name for each party."   s/host name/origin/   (or similar; i.e. you can do this with ports too)
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> --
> Mark Nottingham   http://www.mnot.net/

-> <http://trac.tools.ietf.org/wg/httpbis/trac/changeset/2229>

Best regards, Julian