Re: [I2nsf] WGLC and IPR poll for draft-ietf-i2nsf-nsf-facing-interface-dm-08

"Adrian Farrel" <adrian@olddog.co.uk> Sat, 14 December 2019 19:40 UTC

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Subject: Re: [I2nsf] WGLC and IPR poll for draft-ietf-i2nsf-nsf-facing-interface-dm-08
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Hi,

 

This is a long document and I can't say I have read it in detail. But what I
have seen looks reasonable. I don't object to publication.

 

A couple of things to note:

 

I suggest putting in an RFC Editor Note to ask that all instances of
"draft-ietf-i2nsf-capability" including those in YANG reference clauses are
updated to the RFC that the draft will become before this document reaches
RFC. The reason for suggesting this is that those mentions don't appear as
square bracket references so might get missed. There are some others drafts
in the same situation, but I don't know if they'll become RFCs first.

 

The reference draft-ietf-supa-generic-policy-info-model is probably a bad
idea. I think the draft is dead. The only mention is in section 3, and here
you seem to have copied the relevant text anyway. Maybe just include that
text as your own definitions, and move on?

 

Idnits has a lot to say. You should sort it out.

https://www6.ietf.org/tools/idnits?url=https://www.ietf.org/archive/id/draft
-ietf-i2nsf-nsf-facing-interface-dm-08.txt

The 'standard' way of handling references from with the YANG model, where
you can't include square brackets, is to put a piece of text at the top
(outside the model) that says: "This model makes reference to [foo], [bar],
and [fishcake]."

You can easily delete section 2.

 

It would be nice if the figures were directly referenced from the text.
Instead of "This YANG tree diagram shows." say "The YANG tree diagram in
Figure x shows."

 

Best,

Adrian

 

From: I2nsf <i2nsf-bounces@ietf.org> On Behalf Of Linda Dunbar
Sent: 03 December 2019 22:23
To: i2nsf@ietf.org
Cc: Yoav Nir <ynir.ietf@gmail.com>
Subject: [I2nsf] WGLC and IPR poll for
draft-ietf-i2nsf-nsf-facing-interface-dm-08

 

 

Hello Working Group, 

 

Many thanks to the authors of draft-ietf-i2nsf-nsf-facing-interface-dm to
address all the comments from YANG Doctor review. 

 

This email starts a three weeks Working Group Last Call on
draft-ietf-i2nsf-nsf-facing-interface-dm-08

 
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This poll runs until Jan 6, 2020 (considering many people taking Christmas
to New Year off). 

 

We are also polling for knowledge of any undisclosed IPR that applies to
this Document, to ensure that IPR has been disclosed in compliance with IETF
IPR rules (see RFCs 3979, 4879, 3669 and 5378 for more details).

If you are listed as an Author or a Contributor of this Document, please
respond to this email and indicate whether or not you are aware of any
relevant undisclosed IPR. The Document won't progress without answers from
all the Authors and Contributors.

 

If you are not listed as an Author or a Contributor, then please explicitly
respond only if you are aware of any IPR that has not yet been disclosed in
conformance with IETF rules.

 

Thank you. 

 

Linda & Yoav