Re: [I2nsf] [yang-doctors] Yangdoctors last call review of draft-ietf-i2nsf-capability-data-model-04

[Carl Moberg <[e-mail]>]

Paul,

 Yes! Updated and done.


> On 26 Nov 2019, at 13:52, Mr. Jaehoon Paul Jeong <[e-mail]> wrote:
> 
> Hi Carl,
> Did you have a change to check our revision for I2NSF Capability Draft?
> 
> Thanks.
> 
> Best Regards,
> Paul
> 
> On Wed, Nov 6, 2019 at 10:56 AM Mr. Jaehoon Paul Jeong <[e-mail]> wrote:
> Hi Carl,
> I believe that I have addressed your comments on I2NSF Capability Data Model:
> https://tools.ietf.org/html/draft-ietf-i2nsf-capability-data-model-05 
> 
> If you are satisfied with the revision, could you update the Review result in the following page?
> https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/review-ietf-i2nsf-capability-data-model-04-yangdoctors-lc-moberg-2019-07-15/ 
>  
> Thanks.
> 
> Best Regards,
> Paul 
> 
> On Thu, Jul 25, 2019 at 11:29 PM Mr. Jaehoon Paul Jeong <[e-mail]> wrote:
> Hi Carl,
> Here is the revision letter for the revised draft, reflecting your comments along with the revised draft:
> https://tools.ietf.org/html/draft-ietf-i2nsf-capability-data-model-05 
> 
> This revision letter first addresses the comments from Acee and then
> addresses your comments from page 6.
>  
> If you have further comments and questions, please let me know.
> 
> Thanks.
> 
> Best Regards,
> Paul
> 
> On Mon, Jul 15, 2019 at 6:50 PM Carl Moberg via Datatracker <[e-mail]> wrote:
> Reviewer: Carl Moberg
> Review result: Almost Ready
> 
> This is my review of the [e-mail] module as part
> of draft-ietf-i2nsf-capability-data-model-04.
> 
> The module cleanly passes validation (i.e. 'pyang --ietf') and I have been able
> to load it into a NETCONF server and done basic operations on it (add, query
> for and remove capabilties).
> 
> I have one high-level concern and a couple of nits.
> 
> This document defines "a YANG data model for capabilities of various Network
> Security Functions (NSFs)". After my in initial reading of the draft and I2RS
> background material I found it hard to understand which of the components in
> the I2RS reference architecture that would implement the YANG module (i.e.
> provide NETCONF or RESTCONF protocol implementations). The draft says the
> following:
> 
> """
>    This document provides a data model using YANG [RFC6020][RFC7950]
>    that defines the capabilities of NSFs to centrally manage
>    capabilities of those security devices.  The security devices can
>    register their own capabilities into Network Operator Management
>    (Mgmt) Systems (i.e., Security Controllers) with this YANG data model
>    through the registration interface [RFC8329].
> """
> 
> This seems to point in the direction of the 'Network Operator Managemen (Mgmt)
> Systems' as the location of the YANG datastore, i.e. where this module would be
> implemented.
> 
> My main question then becomes; given the fact that the top-level element of the
> data model is a container ('nsf') with a set of leaf-lists and containers under
> it, this model seems to only allow for the registration of one (1) single NSF.
> This seems to be also supported by the language of the description clauses
> referencing "network service function" in singular.
> 
> I would intuitively expect such a registry to be able to store the capabilities
> of a multitude of NSFs. I would appreciate if the authors could clarify the
> intent and expected usage of the model based on this question.
> 
> Given my initial struggles I would suggest adding clearer upfront language on
> the location of the module and the addition of usage examples of e.g. NSFs
> registering capability instances to registry. (See
> https://tools.ietf.org/html/rfc8407#section-3.12). I believe that would provide
> additional and helpful context to the usage of the model.
> 
> The following drafts are referenced in 'reference' and 'description' fields in
> the YANG module, but are missing from the Informative References section of the
> draft. (See https://tools.ietf.org/html/rfc8407#appendix-A.) -
> draft-hong-i2nsf-nsf-monitoring-data-model-06 - draft-ietf-i2nsf-capability-04
> - draft-dong-i2nsf-asf-config-01
> 
> The modules consistently seem to spell out 'capabilities', but shorten
> 'capability' to 'capa', e.g.:
> 
>      +--rw condition-capabilities
>      |  +--rw generic-nsf-capabilities
>      |  |  +--rw ipv4-capa*   identityref
> 
> I would suggest following https://tools.ietf.org/html/rfc8407#section-4.3.1 and
> spell out 'capability' unless the authors are of the opinion that 'capa' is a
> well known abbreviation.
> 
> Remove the following references (they're not used):
> 
>    [RFC6087]  Bierman, A., "Guidelines for Authors and Reviewers of YANG
>               Data Model Documents", RFC 6087, DOI 10.17487/RFC6087,
>               January 2011, <https://www.rfc-editor.org/info/rfc6087>.
> 
>    [RFC6991]  Schoenwaelder, J., Ed., "Common YANG Data Types",
>               RFC 6991, DOI 10.17487/RFC6991, July 2013,
>               <https://www.rfc-editor.org/info/rfc6991>.
> 
> The format used to reference drafts vary in format, some use the 'ietf-draft'
> prefix in the reference (e.g. '[draft-ietf-i2nsf-sdn-ipsec-flow-protection]')
> and some don't (e.g. '[i2nsf-advanced-nsf-dm]')
> 
> Oh. and it looks like the email address of the WG Chair (no less! :-) is
> spelled incorrectly:
> 
> OLD:
>      WG Chair: Linda Dunbar
>      <mailto:[e-mail]>
> 
> NEW:
>      WG Chair: Linda Dunbar
>      <mailto:[e-mail]>
> 
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> Mr. Jaehoon (Paul) Jeong, Ph.D.
> Associate Professor
> Department of Software
> Sungkyunkwan University
> Office: [phone]
> Email: [e-mail], [e-mail]
> Personal Homepage: http://iotlab.skku.edu/people-jaehoon-jeong.php
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> Associate Professor
> Department of Software
> Sungkyunkwan University
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> Email: [e-mail], [e-mail]
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