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Linda Dunbar <linda.dunbar@futurewei.com> Fri, 13 December 2019 22:20 UTC

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From: Linda Dunbar <linda.dunbar@futurewei.com>
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Authors of  draft-ietf-i2nsf-capability-data-model-05

Thank you very much for making the changes to address YANG Doctor review. There are some minor editorial NITS from the document:


  *   Page 3 second paragraph: there is duplicated "."



  *   Page 5 first paragraph under Figure 1: is "Using I2NSF user" un-necessary?



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  *   Reference to "draft-ietf-i2nsf-nsf-monitoring-data-model-01" is older version. The current one is 02. Maybe don't say the version number?

Same comment goes to other references to specific drafts.





Thank you.

Linda Dunbar

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