Re: [I2nsf] WGLC and IPR poll for draft-ietf-i2nsf-nsf-facing-interface-dm-08

Hi Adrian,
I sincerely appreciate your valuable comments.
We authors will reflect your comments on the revision.

Thanks.

Best Regards,
Paul

On Sun, Dec 15, 2019 at 4:40 AM Adrian Farrel <adrian@olddog.co.uk> wrote:

> Hi,
>
>
>
> This is a long document and I can’t say I have read it in detail. But what
> I have seen looks reasonable. I don’t object to publication.
>
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> A couple of things to note:
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> I suggest putting in an RFC Editor Note to ask that all instances of “draft-ietf-i2nsf-capability”
> including those in YANG reference clauses are updated to the RFC that the
> draft will become before this document reaches RFC. The reason for
> suggesting this is that those mentions don’t appear as square bracket
> references so might get missed. There are some others drafts in the same
> situation, but I don’t know if they’ll become RFCs first.
>
>
>
> The reference draft-ietf-supa-generic-policy-info-model is probably a bad
> idea. I think the draft is dead. The only mention is in section 3, and here
> you seem to have copied the relevant text anyway. Maybe just include that
> text as your own definitions, and move on?
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>
>
> Idnits has a lot to say. You should sort it out.
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> https://www6.ietf.org/tools/idnits?url=https://www.ietf.org/archive/id/draft-ietf-i2nsf-nsf-facing-interface-dm-08.txt
>
> The ‘standard’ way of handling references from with the YANG model, where
> you can’t include square brackets, is to put a piece of text at the top
> (outside the model) that says: “This model makes reference to [foo], [bar],
> and [fishcake].”
>
> You can easily delete section 2.
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> It would be nice if the figures were directly referenced from the text.
> Instead of “This YANG tree diagram shows…” say “The YANG tree diagram in
> Figure x shows…”
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>
>
> Best,
>
> Adrian
>
>
>
> *From:* I2nsf <i2nsf-bounces@ietf.org> *On Behalf Of *Linda Dunbar
> *Sent:* 03 December 2019 22:23
> *To:* i2nsf@ietf.org
> *Cc:* Yoav Nir <ynir.ietf@gmail.com>
> *Subject:* [I2nsf] WGLC and IPR poll for
> draft-ietf-i2nsf-nsf-facing-interface-dm-08
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> Hello Working Group,
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> Many thanks to the authors of draft-ietf-i2nsf-nsf-facing-interface-dm to
> address all the comments from YANG Doctor review.
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> This email starts a three weeks Working Group Last Call
> on draft-ietf-i2nsf-nsf-facing-interface-dm-08
>
> https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-ietf-i2nsf-nsf-facing-interface-dm/
> <https://nam03.safelinks.protection.outlook.com/?url=https%3A%2F%2Fdatatracker.ietf.org%2Fdoc%2Fdraft-ietf-i2nsf-nsf-facing-interface-dm%2F&data=02%7C01%7Clinda.dunbar%40futurewei.com%7C9bcce04caea74f6b257508d778356660%7C0fee8ff2a3b240189c753a1d5591fedc%7C1%7C0%7C637110043059543710&sdata=IPm4dDBvEfO8Wf6HpSOQCrB%2Fta1zB7E0TX8XMvWmTuA%3D&reserved=0>
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> This poll runs until Jan 6, 2020 (considering many people taking Christmas
> to New Year off).
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> We are also polling for knowledge of any undisclosed IPR that applies to
> this Document, to ensure that IPR has been disclosed in compliance with
> IETF IPR rules (see RFCs 3979, 4879, 3669 and 5378 for more details).
>
> If you are listed as an Author or a Contributor of this Document, please
> respond to this email and indicate whether or not you are aware of any
> relevant undisclosed IPR. The Document won't progress without answers from
> all the Authors and Contributors.
>
>
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> If you are not listed as an Author or a Contributor, then please
> explicitly respond only if you are aware of any IPR that has not yet been
> disclosed in conformance with IETF rules.
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>
> Thank you.
>
>
>
> Linda & Yoav
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